Argh! Attack of the Mary Sues!
I have an in-progress story that I need one, or preferably two, beta
readers for. I'm having trouble continuing because the poor,
defenseless original characters have some Mary Sue-ish qualities.
They aren't horrible, but they are there and they're making me
cringe. I guess I need to know how much Mary Sueishness is okay, and
what I might be able to remove to make it less blaring.
I need some reassurance and some discussion about character and plot
development. At this point, it's about 15,000 words, so a reader
would have to devote a little time to it, and, if possible, some
additional time in the future.
I need HONEST critiques, with negative and positive feedback. This
story isn't halfway finished, and I don't want to invest in such a
large undertaking if it sucks.
This is set in movieverse, with only a small amount of comic canon,
but any X-familiar writer would do nicely.
I know I'm asking a lot, but I'm desperate. I throw myself at your
mercy! Please, somebody help me!