6313Re: [xmmff] FIC: The First Time
- Apr 25, 2006I loved this! All the characters - even the ones you
just sketch briefly - are drawn so convincingly.
Oh, one minor typo you might want to fix:
"She knew would be no Jubilation, Inc. at all without
his financial backing and social patronage."
I think you're missing the word "there" in there.
And isn't Pratt in Brooklyn?
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