I'm seeking betas for the following story:
Author: Dorothy Marley
Rating: Explicit sexual content
Pairings: Rodney McKay/John Sheppard, Radek Zelenka/John Sheppard,
Radek Zelenka/(It would be a spoiler)
Category: Humor, First Time
Summary: "So instead of worrying about certain death, we're obsessing
over the size of another man's penis... Seems healthy enough to me."
You can find the story posted here:
At this point, I'm very interested in comments about the readability
of the story. I'm concerned that some of my stylistic choices in the
name of humor might be making the story difficult to read. I'm also
concerned about plot continuity. Even though the story isn't meant to
be taken completely seriously, I still want the narrative to flow from
A to B to C without the reader wondering what they missed.
Also, I said above that the last pairing is a spoiler. I'd like
opinions on whether or not it is, in fact, a spoiler, or if I should
just go ahead and put it in up front.
Other than those specific issues, I'm seeking comments on, well,
anything else. Characterization, plot and style are important to me,
and I always welcome corrections on grammar and spelling. Or anything
else. Please feel free to leave comments on the LJ post, or if you
prefer to work through e-mail, I will be happy to send a text file
either pasted in or as an attachment, whichever you would like.
I plan to start revising probably in the next few weeks, so I'm
looking for a turnaround time of two weeks from now (21st of March or
thereabouts), but I'm not in a particular rush. The deadline is mostly
so I can know when it's okay to start revising. :)
Thanks very much in advance,