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FACES A POEM

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  • TIONG CHUNGHOO
    the ripples in the clear blue lake God is smiling the fleece in the clear blue sky God is caring the haze... the haze God is fuming this first meet between us
    Message 1 of 2 , Aug 31, 2007
      the ripples
      in the clear blue lake
      God is smiling

      the fleece in
      the clear blue sky
      God is caring

      the haze...
      the haze
      God is fuming

      this first meet between us
      i see your biases too

      they infiltrate every cell
      of your face
      clear as sky

      your darting eyes
      they carry bars
      that weigh down
      your trust

      never for one instance they
      rest on mine

      and your heart
      it comes over clear as
      the glasses between us

      JOHN TIONG CHUNGHOO




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    • albiaicehouse
      Tiong, Very interesting to mix nature and social poetry. I might like it longer. Long enough to see where this social relationship is going. This short and
      Message 2 of 2 , Sep 5, 2007
        Tiong,

        Very interesting to mix nature and social poetry.

        I might like it longer. Long enough to see where this social
        relationship is going.

        This short and its very sterile. I don't really get warmed up enough
        to care about the narrator or the person the narrator meets.

        But a good direction for you.

        albi


        --- In ticket2write@yahoogroups.com, TIONG CHUNGHOO <BAGIRUANG@...> wrote:
        >
        > the ripples
        > in the clear blue lake
        > God is smiling
        >
        > the fleece in
        > the clear blue sky
        > God is caring
        >
        > the haze...
        > the haze
        > God is fuming
        >
        > this first meet between us
        > i see your biases too
        >
        > they infiltrate every cell
        > of your face
        > clear as sky
        >
        > your darting eyes
        > they carry bars
        > that weigh down
        > your trust
        >
        > never for one instance they
        > rest on mine
        >
        > and your heart
        > it comes over clear as
        > the glasses between us
        >
        > JOHN TIONG CHUNGHOO
        >
        >
        >
        >
        >
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