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  • albiaicehouse
    John, Is this a dream about childhood? Kind of unresolved, but maybe that was you aim? Are you happy with the line breaks? Some seem at natural pauses while
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      John,

      Is this a dream about childhood?

      Kind of unresolved, but maybe that was you aim?

      Are you happy with the line breaks? Some seem at natural pauses while
      others seem to be emphasizing a certain word, like "down" or "too
      new". Is that what you wanted for each or would you rearrange in the
      next draft?

      albi


      --- In ticket2write@yahoogroups.com, "John" <brightasafig@...> wrote:
      >
      > I can walk from my room past the cuckoo clock,
      > past the picture of the Pope and bedroom doors
      > with no rooms behind, past the head of the stairs
      > where Grandmaman sat me on my potty, down
      > the staircase where I waited, barred
      > behind banister rails, into the too bright too new
      > playroom, poisoned to me now because I broke
      > the Chinese plate. The playbox has an inside but
      > no outside. In the kitchen, where my mother cried,
      > spilt water sizzles on the Rayburn hot plate. Outside,
      > tall firs comb the wind. Papa's glasses lie beneath the ash tree.
      >
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