11857Re: your thoughts please
- May 1, 2003Daleen--
Very moving. You pull on many emotional strings in your poem. Rather
than asking the questions, I would see how these thoughts might link together
more fluidly in sentences. Try extending each thought out, and drawing out
some poignant memories or examples interspersed.
--- In firstname.lastname@example.org, freespirit_1112 <no_reply@y...> wrote:
> Memory of Me
> What if I die tomorrow,
> Will there be lots of tears and sorrow?
> What was my life all about,
> Was it filled by self-love or consumed in self-doubt?
> What were all my achievements in life,
> Was I a good daughter, a good mother, good wife?
> Will anyone miss me or even feel sad,
> Would they say my life was happy, or negative and sad?
> What of my sons, of whom I loved dearly,
> Will happiness find them, will life treat them fairly?
> What most will people remember me by,
> Did anyone know how I adored the sunset, the trees, and the sky?
> Did anyone truly get to know me deep inside,
> Did I achieve my soul's purpose before the day I died?
> Daleen Marie Fletcher
> ps this was shortened.
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