RE: [scbwi-houston] Sharing
- Great opening! I hope we'll all get to read the revision, published by
someone. Dede Ducharme
From: Tamra Norton [mailto:tamranorton@...]
Sent: Tuesday, August 03, 2004 6:07 PM
Subject: Re: [scbwi-houston] Sharing
Here are the first 2 sentances (the first just isn't as good without the
It's not a very smart thing to spit out the window of a moving car. Of
course I learned that the hard way.
I really am thankful that she gave me direction in where the story needs
work. So I'd better get busy.
Gail Greenberg <mtssas@...> wrote:
Could you share the first sentence of your novel since the editor said it
was the best she'd read in a long time?
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- Hey Tamra,
That is a great rejection with lots of info you can use. I
have gotten that a lot "Your 16 year old protagonist sounds like a
grandmother." Zing! Wonder why?
Get busy on your fifth or sixth rewrite. I promise you it
will be worth it.
>I received this piece of wallpaper yesterday from Peachtree--
>Publishers. I'm trying not to be too depressed. Chocolate seems to
>Dear Ms. Norton,
>Thank you for sending MAKE ME A MEMORY for our review. I enjoyed
>reading it and appreciate the opportunity to consider your work.
>Unfortunately we're unable to accept it for publication, though I
>think your work is very promising.
>You have the best first senance I've read in a ling time--and the
>first few paragraphs are also good. In general your writing is very
>pleasant and easy to read. The age of your protagonist, however,
>still feels very inconsistent; she doesn't feel like a
>twelve-year-old girl--sometimes she seems very mature, sometimes
>quite young. You're also dealing with some fairly complex issues--a
>father at war, a great-grandmother with Alzheimer's, a pregnant
>mother--yet I'm not sure any of them get the attention they merrit.
>You may be trying to do too much for a younger age group or not
>enough for an older.
>I hope these comments prove useful. As you sent only a letter-sized
>envelope, I assume you do not want the manuscript back.
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