Re: Eternal Reward: abbreviated
- Hello Noelle,<br><br>I really liked your long
version of "Eternal Reward." It is obvious you have given
much thought to the intricacies of love between two
people. There is a feeling of here is someone who has
been there and done that, in a manner of speaking. It
had pulse, humanity, and captured the interest right
away.<br><br>Also your concept and creativity was
excellent.<br><br>The edited version, while good, in my opinion
definitely did lose something though. Somewhat, of the depth
went out of it, and so the humanity. Although you did
not lose the point, or completely loose that "Oh at
last," feeling, the latter was diminished. And I missed
the lesson of Sterling's selfless
self-sacrifice.<br><br>But it is not your fault. When you have to choose
what is best from many possibilities something goes.
The perfection of what is left remains to be seen in
the end, much like your story.<br><br>All in all a
great job though, and I thank you for creating and
- I like the beginning of the story but was not the subject of the flash fiction a box? or did I miss one?
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