- Dec 16, 2011I had a car-bound friend watch the video and he thought it was a bit preachy, and so missed the message I think. So many Americans have zero experience with anything other than a car-bound suburban existence. Even Chicago and NYC are full of cars, and many visitors would rather take a familiar, even if slow, cab than venture down into the mysterious "subway" or take a bus (generally considered the mode of transport for the poor only).
I thought your narration was fine, and even improved in the more recent version.
Perhaps we need more videos of how an ordinary life is changed in a carfee neighborhood. We need to demonstrate that a place without cars really is a more pleasant place to be!
--- In firstname.lastname@example.org, "J.H. Crawford" <mailbox@...> wrote:
> Hi All,
> As I think I have said, I have given up writing
> books, as nobody seems to read them any more.
> It seems to me that video stands a chance of
> really spreading the carfree word, and this is
> where I intend to focus for a year or longer.
> (I also like doing it, which helps.)
> The latest (and only slightly revised) version
> of Occupy All Streets is on YouTube and can now
> be viewed in full 1080p HD as well.
> I would like to initiate a discussion here of
> how the video can be improved. The symptom
> of the need for improvement is that on Vimeo,
> the video has had:
> 3,431 loads (people who saw the embed by never pressed Play)
> 779 plays
> 98 finishes
> 5 Likes
> (The number of plays on YouTube is too small to consider.)
> What seems to be happening is that only about
> 10% of the people who start watching the video
> stay with it to the end. This suggests that
> something about it is driving them away. Maybe
> it's just that they don't like the message,
> and maybe they don't like the video.
> A few of us have been discussing this, and there
> is a considerable variety of opinion. The two
> main issues:
> 1) Should I continue to narrate this, possibly
> with some professional coaching, or is it
> essential to bring in a professional narrator?
> What, specifically, is wrong with the narration?
> It has been called:
> sounding read, not spoken
> I grant that my early attempts at narration were
> awful, but many people think it has improved a
> good deal since then. I would do practically
> anything to avoid having to bring in a narrator,
> as it would severely cramp my style, to say
> nothing of the zero budget for this work.
> 2) Should the structure of the film be changed?
> Now it begins with a long litany of all that's
> wrong with cars and then moves on to the carfree
> solution. It came up in conversation today that
> maybe the film should START with the solution
> and only then move on to the detailed reasons
> that we need the carfree solution.
> What opinions do you have? There may, of course,
> be other issues than these two.
> Thanks for your ideas and support.
> Best regards,
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> J.H. Crawford . Carfree Cities
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