EDIT: IR: Montbell - Tachyon Anorak - Kurt Papke
- View SourceKurt,
It's been awhile since I've read one of your reports closely, and I have
forgotten how much I enjoy your writing style. Nice work. Just a few
items for your consideration below in the traditional EDIT, Edit, Comment
format. Once you have addressed to your satisfaction, upload and delete
from the test folder.
> All I can say is "*wow*".---In U.S. written English, periods and commas should always fall inside
the quotation marks.
> In this case the windshirt fit well, but if I bend over I will have anexposed lower back.
---I'm assuming you actually tried bending over and discovered this.
Consider rephrasing to reflect this. If you didn't try it, then take a
minute to try it and confirm. Then rephrase to reflect it. (No reason not
to, in my estimation.)
> The fabric is light enough that it will flap in a strong wind. Notlikely to be a big issue.
---Be careful about this one. You may be right on the mark, but if you
haven't actually experienced this yet, it is projecting. Consider testing
and rephrasing to make a more conclusive remark, or else consider adding a
comment to make it clear that this is your supposition not based on
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