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Re: EDIT - Columbia Snowline Softshell - Ed (Edwin) Morse

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  • Edwin Morse
    Derek, All edits (my blundersw) have been corrected. HTML deleted from Tests folder and corrected HTML uploaded to correct folder under Jackets. I will be back
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      Derek,
      All edits (my blundersw) have been corrected. HTML deleted from Tests
      folder and corrected HTML uploaded to correct folder under Jackets.
      I will be back after more testing in about 2 months.

      Ed

      --- In backpackgeartesters@yahoogroups.com, "Derek Hansen"
      <derek.hansen@...> wrote:
      >
      > Ed,
      >
      > Happy new year! Thank you for your report. Here are my edits:
      >
      > ~derek
      >
      > # # #
      >
      > > ...to cold 22 F(-6 C) for most...
      > EDIT: Need a space after "22 F"
      >
      >
      > > The high temperature while I was hiking was one sunny bushwhacking
      > day hike...
      > Edit: Since this sentence is clarifying the previous one, I think
      the
      > verb needs to appear before "while" to make it clear where the
      > antecedent is located.
      >
      > Passive voice: "The high temperature was recorded while I was
      hiking..."
      > Active voice: "I noted the high temperature while I was hiking..."
      >
      >
      > > I've also done one two night backpacking hike and two over night
      hikes.
      > EDIT: done one two-night ... overnight
      >
      >
      > > gets below about 40 F ( C)
      > > when it was 35 F ( C)
      > EDIT: Need to add temperature conversion
      >
      >
      > > During the night I used the Snowline jacket as my pillow over a
      > hydration bladder.
      > Comment: Maybe a minor edit for clarification, consider the
      following
      > structure:
      >
      > "...I used the Snowline jacket over a hydration bladder as my
      pillow."
      >
      > I was imaginging two possibilities as I read: jacket stacked on top
      of
      > water or jacket wrapped around water. It's not a big deal, but I was
      > curious enough to want to know ;)
      >
      >
      > > ...I could hike without the jacket which went into my pack.
      > > ...weight and bulk which makes packing...
      > Edit: Add comma before "which"
      >
      > > jacket is now my all time favorite
      > Edit: all-time
      >
      > > What I like;
      > > What I don't like;
      > Edit: I would use a colon ":" here instead of a semi-colon.
      >
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