Re: EDIT - Columbia Snowline Softshell - Ed (Edwin) Morse
All edits (my blundersw) have been corrected. HTML deleted from Tests
folder and corrected HTML uploaded to correct folder under Jackets.
I will be back after more testing in about 2 months.
--- In firstname.lastname@example.org, "Derek Hansen"
> Happy new year! Thank you for your report. Here are my edits:
> # # #
> > ...to cold 22 F(-6 C) for most...
> EDIT: Need a space after "22 F"
> > The high temperature while I was hiking was one sunny bushwhacking
> day hike...
> Edit: Since this sentence is clarifying the previous one, I think
> verb needs to appear before "while" to make it clear where thehiking..."
> antecedent is located.
> Passive voice: "The high temperature was recorded while I was
> Active voice: "I noted the high temperature while I was hiking..."hikes.
> > I've also done one two night backpacking hike and two over night
> EDIT: done one two-night ... overnightfollowing
> > gets below about 40 F ( C)
> > when it was 35 F ( C)
> EDIT: Need to add temperature conversion
> > During the night I used the Snowline jacket as my pillow over a
> hydration bladder.
> Comment: Maybe a minor edit for clarification, consider the
> "...I used the Snowline jacket over a hydration bladder as my
> I was imaginging two possibilities as I read: jacket stacked on top
> water or jacket wrapped around water. It's not a big deal, but I was
> curious enough to want to know ;)
> > ...I could hike without the jacket which went into my pack.
> > ...weight and bulk which makes packing...
> Edit: Add comma before "which"
> > jacket is now my all time favorite
> Edit: all-time
> > What I like;
> > What I don't like;
> Edit: I would use a colon ":" here instead of a semi-colon.