Edit: INITIAL REPORT- TIMEX EXPEDITION E-TIDE TEMP COMPASS WATCH- RALPH DITTON
- No one should have to edit 2 Auzi reports back to back...
That said, nice work. In fact, all three report gave me a good
description of a hard to descrbe item. I have a few edits for you.
And as with AP, several comments which may be style. Disregard if
they dont seem right to you.
--- In firstname.lastname@example.org, "Ralph Ditton"
>you mean crying gear...
> Hey Coy Boy,
> Get your laughing gear around this.
I have dished you up a smorgasbord of
> potential edits.can be
> The text version is set out below and the copy in the test folder
> peeped at by clicking on the following:(124 mi) to go.
> I am nearly there as it is 964 km (603 mi) long. Just on 200 km
Comment: you guys sure talk funny. Just on makes no sense to me. I
would combine these two sentences and say "is 964 (603 mi) long so I
have just (or just have) 200 km (124) to go."
> Instruction sheet: Printed in the PhilippinesComment: I'm not sure this is relevant? I'd leave it out.
> This is a "what you see is what you get" watch.Comment: I like that description
> There is no information as to which end to use of the indicatorhand when trying to read the current tide position as there are arrow
heads at both ends.
Edit: I am pretty sure you have "end to use of" backward and
somewhat out of order. At least I got lost. How does "There is no
information as to which end of the indicator hand to use when trying
to read" sound?
> The dedicated indicator hand at the red end has an arrow headinside an arrow head. (See above photo).
Comment: Ahh, now I understand what AP was referring too. or maybe
not. is it black at the other end?
This is where I have some concerns with the lack of information in
the Instruction Sheet about how to read the dedicated indicator hand.
If I took the red end of the indicator hand then it is clearly wrong.
Comment: I think Shelia mentioned the same thing. She concluded that
it is backwards too what is seems to read.
As far as I know, the difference in hemispheres should not make any
difference as the phases of the moon are the same in both hemispheres
at the same time.
Comment: dont ask me either. I do know camodes flush backwards but
that's about all.
>off my wrist as my body heat affects the result. I must leave it off
> To get the best results from the thermometer I must take the watch
for a number of minutes to cool down to the environment.
Comment: getting picky but instead of "to cool down: I would say so
it will cool down". I could read that as you want to cool down.
> My Kestrel has an exposed thermistorComment/Edit? thermistor should be thermostat unless this is a word I
am just not familiar with.
> which responds quickly to change in temperature and I must admit Idid expect to see something
Comment: easer to just go ahead and say it. Put commas here " in
temperature, and I must admit. I did expect
> To make sure that I had it right I checked the watch against my owncompass.
Comment: was it? Also might add some punctuation after right.
> A watchs basic function.Edit: watchs should be watches
> The hour and minute hands are large with a luminesce strip fornight reading. The second hand is a skinny red one without any
luminesce strip. (See above photo).
Comment: word is saying luminance strip. (2 places) also suggested
luminescent strip. However, yours may be right.
> To set the time was very easy as the instructions arestraightforward.
Comment: To set the time is awkward, how about; Setting the time was
> I have worn the watch for a full days hiking so far and I foundthat I did perspire under the band and it became a bit uncomfortable,
so I took it off and wiped the base of the watch and my arm, replaced
it back on my arm a little bit looser to the fifth hole from the end,
as my wrist had swelled a bit due to the heat.
Comment; so you like long sentences too
> It was 22 C (72 F) and very still and the humidity was 61%.Comment: take out first and and replace with comma
> There is a splash of luminesce on the red tip of the dedicatedindicator hand and I can only barely see it with my glasses on.
Comment: word likes luminescence
> Temperature readings? Ummm. I really need to give this a good shakeout as the needle seems to like the 20 to 25 C (68 - 77 F) range when
the real temperature is lower according to my Kestrel 3500 Pocket
Weather Meter. Maybe it will ride up with wear so to speak! Time will
Comment: to bad about the temp function. I guess ride up means
loosen up? If it don't you might need to get a replacement watch?
That's all I see. Fix to your satisfaction and upload to the proper