Re: [backpackgeartesters] Re: EDIT FR - Tilley LTM6 Airflo Hat
- Thanks Bill for your responses. The main thing I was
looking for as far as the temperature thing was
consistancy. I just think if you are going to put
degrees on some of them it should go on all of them.
But if it is a style thing then that is okay by me.
The html version looks good and like you said, the
"first report" is not clickable. You may upload when
--- AsABat <wjj2001@...> wrote:
> My responses are included below. Most of the editsChuck Carnes
> were not made as
> they are matters of style. See below:
> --- In email@example.com, Chuck
> <ctcarnes1@y...> wrote:
> > > I really do not like to wear hats, but I have no
> > > choice. My eyes are
> > > extremely sensitive to light, so I have a
> > > of mostly cheap
> > > hats I wear whenever I spend much time outdoors.
> > > hiking I use one
> > > of several floppy nylon hats, which become
> > > the longer I wear
> > > them, and give me a rather rag-tag look. Working
> > > the yard it is
> > > usually a larger straw lifeguard hat. Of course,
> > > have an extensive
> > > collection of baseball caps picked up at various
> > > events, none of
> > > which shield my eyes when the sun is at my side,
> > > alone protect my
> > > ears from sunburn.
> > *** This gets to be a little bit long. I think BGT
> > wants to see our Personal Biographical stuff to be
> > shorter. See if you can compress this a little.
> ###RESPONSE: This second paragraph is not so much
> the biography but
> more a description of my use and attitude towards
> hats. I think it
> adds to the reader's understanding of my report.
> > > This is the second of three reports of the
> > > LTM6 Airflo Hat
> > > based on use over the last two months. The first
> > > report described the
> > ***> socks in detail.
> > I think you ment to say 'hat'
> ###RESPONSE: Uh, yeah, hat! Corrected.
> > *** I'm not sure how the Product Description will
> > on the web site but it looks like it runs together
> > here.
> ###RESPONSE: It's an Unordered List (UL) on the web.
> Yahoo makes a
> mess of it here.
> > ***> skies ranged from 32 degrees F (0 C) at
> > to
> > You can omit the word 'degrees'
> ###RESPONSE: I write my reports in a conversational
> style, and would
> use the word "degrees" in conversation. The "F" and
> the conversion in
> parentheses are included for international readers.
> > > near 70 F (21 C)
> > > at about 7,000 feet (2,100 m) elevation. About
> > > percent of the
> > ***> route was covered in up to four feet (1.2 m)
> > I think I would go ahead and say 4 ft or feet,
> > your conversion has the numeral equivalant
> ###RESPONSE: Style.
> > > snow. Even a sharp hat like this cannot make one
> > ***> sharp all time
> > Remove 'time' and add 'the'
> > > time!
> ###RESPONSE: Corrected.
> > ***> eight-foot (2.5 m) overhead clearance. With
> > Here again use 8 ft or feet.
> ###RESPONSE: Style.
> > ***> trip out several low branches tried to knock
> > Need comma between 'out' and 'several'
> ###RESPONSE: Added to avoid restarting the comma
> > ***> could be anything from a warm and dry 90
> > F
> > Omit 'degrees'
> ###RESPONSE: Style - see above.
> > Good report Bill! Very informative. If you would
> > upload on of these to the test folder I would like
> > see it there before you upload to the site. Let me
> > know when you do this so we can get it uploaded to
> > site. Thank you again.
> ###RESPONSE: It's in the test folder now. Let me
> know when I can
> upload to the permanent location. (Hint: My links
> won't work in the
> test folder because I use relative links rather than
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