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76067Re: LTR PCT DVD - David Wilkes

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  • Kurt
    Jun 20, 2013
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      Good catches both!!

      --- In backpackgeartesters@yahoogroups.com, david wilkes <amatbrewer@...> wrote:
      >
      > Kurt,
      > I noticed two other mistakes in the report that I intend to
      > fix (tonight if I have time).
      > In the third paragraph, the line “A few days after watching
      > the film I loaded the disk into my laptop and started watching the extras.” should
      > have been at the end of the paragraph not in the middle.
      >  
      > > …unable to refrain to pause… Needs to be fixed. I will
      > change the line to: “I have also been unable to refrain from pausing various
      > scenes trying to see if it is a location that I recognize.”
      >
      > Thanks again,
      > Dave
      >
      >
      >
      > >________________________________
      > > From: Kurt Papke <kwpapke@...>
      > >To: david wilkes <amatbrewer@...>; BGTers <backpackgeartesters@yahoogroups.com>
      > >Sent: Wednesday, June 19, 2013 3:08 PM
      > >Subject: [backpackgeartesters] Re: LTR PCT DVD - David Wilkes
      > >
      > >
      > >
      > > 
      > >Nice report David - i can tell you really enjoyed the movie! I have
      > >no substantive corrections for you, just some grammatical nitpicking:
      > >
      > >> In this report I will refer to Tell It ON the Mountain
      > >
      > >EDIT: capitalization, "On"
      > >
      > >> All of the photos in this report are screen captures from the film
      > >
      > >Comment: great job!! The screen captures added a lot.
      > >
      > >> As mentioned the film starts out with some very nice title graphics and opening scenes then goes on to provide some information about the PCT, the people involved and especially the few folks who for the lack of another term star in this film.
      > >
      > >EDIT: comma issues. I recommend "As mentioned, the film starts out
      > >with some very nice title graphics and opening scenes, then goes on to
      > >provide some information about the PCT, the people involved, and
      > >especially the few folks who for the lack of another term star in this
      > >film."
      > >
      > >> Mt Adams
      > >
      > >EDIT: spell out Mount or add period for abbreviation "Mt. Adams"
      > >
      > >> through hikers
      > >
      > >edit: I think this should be hypenated "through-hikers", that's the
      > >way I typically see it.
      > >
      > >> While some of the shots seam
      > >
      > >EDIT: seem
      > >
      > >> So could easily become a major portion of a film like Tell It On The Mountain.
      > >
      > >EDIT: incomplete sentence (no subject). maybe the easiest way to fix
      > >this one is "This could easily..."
      > >
      > >> But the filmmakers did a wonderful job in my opinion of including enough information about the trail to provide the needed backdrop and framework for the people that the film focuses on.
      > >
      > >EDIT: can't start a sentence with "But". I think you could just drop
      > >the "But" and it reads well.
      > >
      > >C'est tout. After making your corrections, upload at will and
      > >remember to delete from the Test folder. Thanks for your good work on
      > >this test!
      > >
      > >--Kurt
      > >
      > >
      > >
      > >
      >
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