76058Re: LTR PCT DVD - David Wilkes
- Jun 19, 2013Nice report David - i can tell you really enjoyed the movie! I have
no substantive corrections for you, just some grammatical nitpicking:
> In this report I will refer to Tell It ON the MountainEDIT: capitalization, "On"
> All of the photos in this report are screen captures from the filmComment: great job!! The screen captures added a lot.
> As mentioned the film starts out with some very nice title graphics and opening scenes then goes on to provide some information about the PCT, the people involved and especially the few folks who for the lack of another term star in this film.EDIT: comma issues. I recommend "As mentioned, the film starts out
with some very nice title graphics and opening scenes, then goes on to
provide some information about the PCT, the people involved, and
especially the few folks who for the lack of another term star in this
> Mt AdamsEDIT: spell out Mount or add period for abbreviation "Mt. Adams"
> through hikersedit: I think this should be hypenated "through-hikers", that's the
way I typically see it.
> While some of the shots seamEDIT: seem
> So could easily become a major portion of a film like Tell It On The Mountain.EDIT: incomplete sentence (no subject). maybe the easiest way to fix
this one is "This could easily..."
> But the filmmakers did a wonderful job in my opinion of including enough information about the trail to provide the needed backdrop and framework for the people that the film focuses on.EDIT: can't start a sentence with "But". I think you could just drop
the "But" and it reads well.
C'est tout. After making your corrections, upload at will and
remember to delete from the Test folder. Thanks for your good work on
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