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RE: [BackpackGearTest] Edit/Approval - MSR Folding Spork - Fran ces Penn

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  • fpenn@sbcglobal.net
    THANKS FOR THE EDITS. I have revised the report and uploaded it. From: richardglyon@att.net Sent: ‎July‎ ‎7‎, ‎2013 ‎6‎:‎55‎ ‎AM To:
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      THANKS FOR THE EDITS. I have revised the report and uploaded it.

      From: richardglyon@...
      Sent: ‎July‎ ‎7‎, ‎2013 ‎6‎:‎55‎ ‎AM
      To: BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com
      Subject: [BackpackGearTest] Edit/Approval - MSR Folding Spork - Frances Penn


      You've just earned a Brownie point. I'm always pleased to see small items reviewed and your OR is a particularly good one, with helpful photographs. Your edits are below in the standard EDIT/Edit/Comment format; after revising you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/2oclru Don't forget to delete your Tests/OR folder copy.

      Cheers, Richard

      ###My total daypack weight is usually 15 lb (7 kg) and my total backpack weight is usually 28-30 lb (13-14 kg) ###
      Edit: Consider noting that the weights include or don't include food and water.

      ###Manufacturer: MSR ###
      EDIT: Cascade Designs, Inc.
      Edit: Somewhere at the beginning of your OR you might indicate that MSR is the acronym of Mountain Safety Research.

      ### Manufacturer's Website: <<HYPERLINK GOES HERE"http://www.campmor.com" ###
      EDIT: http://www.cascadedesigns.com/MSR

      Listed Weight: .45 oz (12 g)
      Measured Weight: .50 oz (14 g)###
      EDIT: It's too easy to miss that little period. Here and anywhere else it's less than one, add a zero in front – e. g. 0.45 oz, 0.50 oz

      ###The spork comes in four colors which are designed to coordinate with the MSR Deep Dish Plates and Mugs. ###
      EDIT: Anywhere that you are referring to the product under review, it should be "Spork," with an initial cap. That's how the manufacturer does it, so you must as well. Partly for legal (trademark) reasons but also to distinguish a reference to the specific product from sporks in general. I think that you use the generic term twice ("I especially like that the handle is longer than the other sporks I have used" and "I used the less expensive sporks.") but please review your OR on this point.

      ###I was able to eat the entire meal with this sporkin the same position in my hand.###
      EDIT: Spork in [initial cap; two words]

      ###I usually carry the spork in the same bag as the first meal where it will be
      used. Once that meal is finished, I usually just lick the spork clean and then transfer it to the next food bag where it will be used.###
      EDIT: when it will be used [in both sentences]

      ###I usually eat my meals out of their ziploc or freeze dried bag or foil pouch###
      EDIT: Ziploc [With an initial cap – another trademark]

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