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Re: Edit/Approval - Warbonnet Traveler SL - Steve Kidd

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  • ftroop94
    Thanks Richard! I ve attended to the edits and posted the report. ~SMK
    Message 1 of 2 , Dec 27, 2012
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      Thanks Richard!

      I've attended to the edits and posted the report.

      ~SMK

      --- In BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com, "richardglyon@..." <montana.angler@...> wrote:
      >
      > Steve,
      >
      > Excellent OR, very understandable to one (me) who's not very familiar with hammocks or hammock camping. A few edits, in the standard format. After revising you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/czltnee Don't forget to delete your Tests/OR folder copy.
      >
      > Happy New Year!
      >
      > Richard
      >
      > <<WARBONNET TRAVELER>> [title]
      > EDIT: WARBONNET TRAVELER SINGLE LAYER HAMMOCK
      >
      > <<The ridgeline is designed to minimize the guess work when attempting to get the correct sag in the hammock. >>
      > Edit: guesswork [one word]
      >
      > <<The name, 1.7 oz represents the weight of the nylon material. >>
      > Edit: I'd delete the comma.
      >
      > <<Each square yard (.84 ^2 m) weighs 1.7 oz (48 g).>>
      > EDIT: Delete the parentheticals. Fabric weight need not be converted.
      >
      > <<Their double layered Hammocks are often used for placing close foam cell pads between the layers for insulation and they generally allow for a 'flatter' lay than the single layered versions. >>
      > EDIT: Double Layer Hammocks; Single Layer version [Warbonnet uses initial caps for these models, and no "ed" at the end, so you should too. These are product names. Check your entire Review for other instances of this.]
      >
      > <<A single layer hammock weighs less than the double layered version, but doesn't
      > always lay as 'flat' since the one layer of material has more stretch with the
      > body weight of the occupant. >>
      > EDIT: Single Layer Hammock, Double Layer version [as above]
      > EDIT: lie as flat [Unless "lay" is a term routinely used in describing hammocks.]
      >
      > <<I'd first like to address the above mentioned specified weights >>
      > Edit: above-mentioned [with a hyphen]
      >
      > << I would easily say it is my go to hammock.>>
      > Edit: go-to [with a hyphen]
      >
      > <<As previously mentioned, to achieve a flat lay in the hammock>>
      > EDIT: flat lie [as above]
      >
      > <<and allowed me to add doors to the end for a 360 degree enclosure from wind and rain.>>
      > Edit: doors to the ends [unless all doors are at one end]
      > Edit: 360-degree [with a hyphen]
      >
      > << but in recent months this smaller Colorado cottage industry vendor has done just that by offering their own whoopie sling suspension option. >>
      > Edit: its own
      >
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