Re: [BackpackGearTest] Edit/Approval - Yukon Charlie's BETA snowshoes - Kathy Waters
Thanks for another insightful edit. I've made all the corrections and deleted and uploaded. These are really great snowshoes - I've had other snowshoes 3 times the price and I still prefer my ancient Chinooks and now the BETAS. John is the same way - 3 pairs of snowshoes and he still wears his YCs. We even bought our son, daughter-in-law and granddaughter YCs as well.
See you on the next OR round!
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Subject: [BackpackGearTest] Edit/Approval - Yukon Charlie's BETA snowshoes - Kathy Waters
Excellent OR, on a product from a manufacturer new to me. A few edits, in the standard format and you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/82xv8bz Don't forget to delete your Tests/OR fiolder copy.
<<Sizes Available: 8x21, 8x25 and 8x29
Size Reviewed: 8x21>>
EDIT: I assume these are inches. If so, (a) say so, (b) add metric conversions, and (c) add measured length and width, (d) noting where you measured the width.
<<MSRP: US$ 89.00 to 109.00
MSRP Reviewed: US$ 89.00
Listed Weight (by size): 3.4 lb (1.5 kg) to 4.4 lb (2 g)
Reviewed Measured Weight: 3.4 lb (1.5 kg)>>
Edit: I'd give only the weights for your version.
<<Photo Courtesy of Yukon Charlie>>
EDIT: Yukon Charlie's [Here and by my count five other places, not counting a few where you got it right.
<<8x21 Carries: Up to 150 lbs (68 kg)
8x25 Carries: Up to 200 lbs (91 kg)
8x28 Carries: Up to 256 lbs (116 kg)>>
Edit: Again, I'd provide only the capacity for the size you reviewed.
<< This is a gender specific snowshoe with technical features >>
Edit: gener-specific [with a hyphen]
<<uiFIELD USE AND PERFORMANCE>>
EDIT: Delete "ui"
<<Over the last several months (January through May, 2012)>>
Edit: The comma is unnecessary
<<and this past March along with my daughter-in-law and granddaughter entered my first event, a charity 5K race to support breast cancer. >>
Edit: Why would you want to support breast cancer? "breast cancer research"
<<With less weight - day pack of 15 lb (68.kg) or no pack at all - if I walked
with care, I could safely navigate soft snow. >>
EDIT - Sounds like projection. Rephrase if you actually hiked with them under these conditions; otherwise delete.
<< I will probably leave the BETAs at home and stick to my Chinooks.>>
EDIT: You need to identify the Chinooks as another Yukon Charlie's snowshoe - do it here rather than later. Also, your earlier OR has been deleted, so you need to revise the later reference accordingly.
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