Re: Edit/Approval - GSI Outdoors Tekk Cutlery Set - Andrea Murland
- Thanks for the edits on both, Richard.
Neither item was on my list of "to-do" ORs but the call made me think of them.
Uploaded & deleted...see you on the next one.
--- In BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com, "richardglyon@..." <montana.angler@...> wrote:
> This rates a brownie point for sure; thanks for adding a couple of Reviews on small items. Several of my edits are repeats of those on the bowl. After revising you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/7f8sym5 , and delete your Tests/OR folder copy.
> Cheers, Richard
> << I began hiking frequently in 2006 and have since hiked in Western Canada,
> Australia, and spent 2 months backpacking in the Alps. >>
> Edit/Comment: A style suggestion: Single-digit numbers in text are easier to read than numerals. "two months"
> <<I spend most weekends either day-hiking or on 2-3 day backpacking trips,>>
> Edit: 2- or 3-day [with hyphens]
> <<MSRP: USD 2.95>>
> Edit: Once upon a time the Grand Master (Jerry) decreed that it should be "$2.95 US." I don't know if that's still in force, but changing would conform your OR to other reports and reviews on BGT.
> <<Listed Dimensions: 16 cm (6.3 in) x 6.4 cm (1.5 in) x 2.5 cm (1.0 in)>>
> EDIT: As in the other OR, GSI lists its dimensions in inches, so you should list those first. Here the weight is a bit more complicated, as both 23 g and 0.7 oz are listed. Rather than explain something unrelated to the product (and after all what's a gram), it's OK to leave the listed weight as you have done.
> <<The ring snaps closed and can be opened but pulling perpendicular to the plane of the ring. >>
> EDIT: by pulling
> <<However, the knife kind of squished my cheese when I tried to use it for that, especially after a couple of warm days in my pack. >>
> Edit: This reads somewhat awkwardly, though I understand your point. See if you can revise to move the pack storage comment closer to "cheese," to which it relates. Perhaps "the knife kind of squished my cheese (softened considerably by a couple of warm days in my pack) when I tried to use it on that."