EdIT/Approval - Primus Windscreen - Chad Poindexter
- Chad, thanks for the prompt and effective revisions. Just a few more edis (same format, mostly suggestions. After revising you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/ycg23lg Don't forget to delete your Tests/OR folder copy.
<< When Primus designed this windscreen, they did so with a purpose; A purpose to increase the stove's efficiency by using this windscreen in conjunction with the stove. >>
EDIT: they did so with a purpose: to increase the stove's efficiency [colon instead of semi-colon, eliminate redundancy]
Edit: Consider "in conjunction with this stove, " to emphasize that it was for the Express (rather than all stoves).
<<Most recently I have used the windscreen with my stove while at a
shelter on the summit of Mt. LeConte, >>
Edit: Again I suggest identifying your stove here. Could be in parentheses. Up to you, however.
<<Once I recieved the windscreen in the mail>>
EDIT: received [spelling]
<<With this in mind, I believe that my stove, in conjunction with the windscreen, is working at least somewhat more efficiently than if the stove were operating on it's own.>>
EDIT: its own [no apostrophe]
- Richard, thanks for the edits and approval. All has been made, the old report is gone from the sight and the new one lives in it's new home now. Thanks, Chad