Re: [BackpackGearTest] Edit/Appro: Golite Quest Backpack Women's - Cheryl McMurray
- Thanks a lot Roger. The edits are finished and the final result is posted.
On Feb 14, 2010, at 2:09 AM, Roger Caffin wrote:
> Edit/Appro: Golite Quest Backpack Women's - Cheryl McMurray
> Hi Cheryl
> Interesting stuff.
> A few Comments on style which you can use or ignore, as you wish. A few
> Edits, but I think you can look after those yourself. When you have tidied
> it up you are clear to post it at
> Roger Caffin
> BGT Editor
> > I've been backpacking and hiking for four years, mostly on weekends year
> > around. Overnight
> > trips are usually long weekend trips in the Eastern Sierras with 32 lb to
> > 40 lb (15 kg to 18 kg)
> > loads depending on the season. One class two rock climb with a day pack
> > is common.
> > Day hikes are 10-15 mi (16 km to 24 km) in the San Gabriel Mountains with
> > loads of 15 lb to 20 lb
> > (7 kg to 9 kg).
> Comment ONLY. You have mixed 'a to b' and 'a-b' styles. I don't mind a bit.
> > was pleased with the color which is a two toned blue with black pockets.
> Comment only: I would write two-toned'.
> > Overall I like the size and the simplicity of the packs design.
> EDIT: the pack's design
> > hoping that the fabric material will be durable enough to hold up by
> > excercising a little extra care.
> EDIT: exercising
> > The small elastic pocket inside of each hip belt pocket is perfect for my
> > spare camera battery
> EDIT: delete 'of'
> > The first trip that I did with this pack was the desert trip which I
> > needed to pack in all of my water
> Edit: 'the desert trip where I needed to pack '
> > At this point I am a little disappointed with the packs performance
> EDIT: the pack's performance
> > With all of the differing movements and positions that I was required to
> > do in order
> Edit: I suggest deleting the leading 'with'.
> > After a two trip break from using this pack I used it on a four day trip
> > in the
> > Sierra's which I did two serious day hikes.
> EDIT: 'Sierra's during which I did two serious day hikes'
> > One thing that I've always liked about this pack is the features.
> Edit: a tricky bit of grammar. I suggest 'are the features'.
> > Considering what I have put the pack through on the day hike outings it
> > has held up well
> > given the lighter material used with only visible scrapes.
> Edit: grammar. I suggest
> ' Considering what I have put the pack through on the day hike outings and
> given the lighter material used,
> it has held up well with only visible scrapes.'
> > bring the shoulder straps more towards the outer part of the shoulder
> Edit: shoulders
> > It is possible, also, that there has been a break-in period for this pack
> Comment only: I very much doubt it! Not with a pack this light.
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