- Thanks for editing. Final has been uploaded. -ZackMessage 1 of 3 , Dec 7, 2009View SourceThanks for editing.
Final has been uploaded.
--- In BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com, "richardglyon" <rlyon@...> wrote:
> A few edits, in the same format as before. When you have revised, you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/yjw8hnu Thanks for working through this with me. Cheers, Richard
> << I currently attend school on the east coast of the US so I've encountered various terrains in all seasons.>>
> Edit: "United State" would be better than "US"
> EDIT: Your link must be clickable.
> <<Manufacturer's Measurements>>
> EDIT: In the HTML version the apostrophe is an "Õ." Please revise.
> << The two pole wedge design allows the Inyo 2 to be highly resistant to wind>>
> Edit: two-pole [with a hyphen]
> <<This last month the foot pole snapped on me breaking at the middle link, I was extremely displeased at having to get a replacement, which cost me $17 from Coleman, but they still carried the parts and shipped it extremely fast.>>
> Edit: This is a bit difficult to follow. Consider making it two sentences, ending the first after "middle link."
> <<Things I don't like:
> no compression stuff sack
> taped rather than seam-sealed seams>>
> Edit: Strictly a style point, but you begin each of your likes with a capital letter, and for consistency you might want to do the same here.
- Zack, I didn t notice that this was your second OR. Congratulations - you have qualified for Newbie status. Once you get a signed Tester Agreement to JerryMessage 2 of 3 , Dec 7, 2009View SourceZack, I didn't notice that this was your second OR. Congratulations - you have qualified for Newbie status. Once you get a signed Tester Agreement to Jerry Goller you will be eligible to apply for gear. To do so you should join our sister group, backpackgeartesters, and watch for Test Calls.
I hope you'll keep the ORs coming. It wins friends and influences people among those who make test selections, and keeps your writing skills sharp.
Best regards, Richard
--- In BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com, "painting.accident" <painting.accident@...> wrote:
> Thanks for editing.
> Final has been uploaded.