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Re: [BackpackGearTest] Edit/Approval - Bridgedale Womens Bamboo Crew Socks - Kathy Waters

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  • Kathy Waters
    Richard, Nice to know my edits keep you busy ! Thanks! I ve deleted from the test folder, made the corrections and updated. Stay tuned, I think I have at
    Message 1 of 2 , Nov 24, 2009
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      Richard,

      Nice to know my edits keep you busy <g>! Thanks! I've deleted from the test folder, made the corrections and updated. Stay tuned, I think I have at least 3 more sock ORs in the making.

      Kathy

      ----- Original Message -----
      From: richardglyon
      To: BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com
      Sent: Tuesday, November 24, 2009 8:16 AM
      Subject: [BackpackGearTest] Edit/Approval - Bridgedale Womens Bamboo Crew Socks - Kathy Waters



      OK Kathy, Here you go, in the usual format. Another of my favorite manufacturers. After revising you may upload at http://tinyurl.com/yz4q5eo

      Thanks for keeping the queue full. Heading to Yellowstone for Thanksgiving? Cheers, Richard

      <<bordering my 35 acre14 hectares "backyard" >>
      EDIT: Need a slash between the acres and hectares
      Edit: Both should be hyphenated, and "hectares" probably ought to be singular.

      <<Over the past 15 years, my husband, John and I have also had the good fortune to hike/snowshoe glaciers, rain forests, mountains and deserts>>
      Edit: Drop the comma after "husband." With the comma it might be a threesome who are hiking (the "edit á trois again?).

      <<Measured Weight: 2.5 oz (71 g)>>
      EDIT: Per sock or per pair?

      <<Fibre Content:
      35% Bamboo
      34% Coolmax®/polyester
      30% Nylon/polyamide
      1% Lycra®/elastane

      Guarantee: If you are not completely satisfied with the quality and
      performance of your Bridgedale socks at any time within 1 year of purchase,
      return them to the place of purchase together with your proof of purchase
      for exchange.

      Bridgedale is proud to support Plant A BooT, a campaign to fight global
      warming through increased bamboo cultivation.>>
      EDIT/Edit: Looks like at least one quotation in there. Whatever is a quotation should be set off with quotation marks. If it's not a quotation, "fibre" is spelled "fiber" on this side of the Atlantic.

      <<Where ever the Socks are blue, the material is thicker than the rest of the Socks, about double, I think.>>
      EDIT: Wherever [one word]

      <<For the purpose of this Owner's Review,>>
      Edit: I usually call it an "Owner Review," without the possessive.

      <<The Bridgedale Bamboo Crew Socks are gender specific and fit me perfectly.>>
      Edit: gender-specific [with a hyphen]

      << And while, the Socks were damp when I removed them at the end of the day, my skin was not. >>
      Edit: The first comma (after "while") is genuinely confusing, almost in the EDIT category. I'd delete it.

      << The Socks are starting to show adverse signs of wear.>>
      Edit: Such as? Pilling? Becoming threadbare? Consider adding some detail.

      <<To be fair, Bridgedale does not advertise these Socks to be ideal for hiking and backpacking but for " lifestyle, sport and everyday activities.">>
      EDIT: Delete the space between the quotation mark and "lifestyle."

      <<Kathleen (Kathy) Water>>
      EDIT: It's "Waters," I believe.





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