EDIT: L. L. Bean Stowaway Rainwear Jacket with Gore-Tex OR Kellie
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Height: 5'10.5" (1.55 Meters)
### Edit: Looks like your conversion is off here. 5'10.5" should
convert to 1.79 m. It is kind of common though to round to the
nearest even inch for height, so if you want to go to 5'11, the
conversion would be 1.80 meters.
Weight: 165 Pounds (113 Kilograms)
### Edit: Another rounding problem 165 lb should be 75 kg.
### Comment: Typically we use the following abbreviations: m for
meter; lb for pound; kg for kilograms instead of spelling the words
Email address: Kelliecar@...
City, State, Country: Ellicott City, MD, USA
Backpacking Background: I have been day hiking for over 12 years, but
took up backpacking 3 years ago and still have much to learn. My
situation is a little unique as I have a service animal that must
have gear too. I prefer longer hikes averaging 10-15 miles (16.10 km -
24.15 km) each day.
### EDIT: if you are using `km' for kilometers you also need to
use `mi' for miles for consistency. Also, you can round the
conversions (16 24 km) which is better since the distance is not
Overnight trips range from 3-4 days about every six weeks. Most of
the terrain I encounter is very rocky, hilly, and in the Mid-Atlantic
region with many of my hikes on sections of the AT.
### EDIT: You need to spell out `Appalachian Trail'. Although it's
one of my favorite trails too, not everyone is familiar with trail
### Comment: We like to get some information in the background on
what type of backpacker you are light weight, mid weight, tent
camper, hammock sleeper, etc. I know this is a little difficult to
do and still keep the bio at 100 words, but you could consider
condensing a few of the sentences to give you a little more space to
describe your style. (I.E. I've been a day-hiker for 12 years, and
backpacked for 3 years. I backpack with a service animal that must
have gear too. I like hiking 10-15 mi (16-24 km) each day, and take
3-4 day trips about every six weeks.) Doing something like this
gives you a lot more words to play with to tell us more about how you
The cut in this years model is a little longer than older models and
this one is long enough in the
back to overlap the matching pair of pants I purchased the same day.
### EDIT: need apostrophe in "year's"
There are elastic draw cords in the hood and at the bottom of the
jacket so I can customize the fit. The wrists cuffs have elastic
which helps to keep them in place and are comfortable and not as
scratchy as some Gortex products are. The cuffs also have a Velcro
faster strip to allow for a tighter fit if necessary.
### EDIT: I think you mean a *fastener* strip.
It took only a few seconds to stuff into the pocket made for storing
the jacket and also functions as a usable pocket when wearing the
jacket. When the jacket is stored in its pocket, it is fully enclosed
in mesh, with only the zipper being exposed allowing for easy storage
which protects the outer shell of the jacket.
There are two large angled zip up pockets on both the left and right
bottom front of the jacket. The pulls on the zippers are larger
enough to easily be zipped with a gloved hand. I found these to be
just the right size for a pair of gloves and my phone. I specifically
appreciate the inside breast pocket which is perfect for passport, ID
card, or slim wallet which doubles as the aforementioned stowaway
pocket for the jacket.
To stow away the jacket I used it like a stuff sack for a sleeping
bag. I simply stuff the bag, do not try to fold or roll the jacket
and put in the pocket as it will not fit this way
you must "stuff"
the jacket in the pocket by randomly grabbing fistfuls of the jacket
and then stuffing it into the stowaway pocket. It stuffs into the
pocket in mere seconds and then I zip it shut and the jacket is
stored within its own mesh pocket!
### Edit: The above paragraphs have some awkward wording and could
use a little different organization. You jump from describing
stuffing the jacket into its pocket, to describing other pockets, and
then back to describing stuffing it again. Can you re-word this to
avoid jumping back and forth and to make the thoughts flow together
The front zipper is very rugged and made out of a type of non-
metallic material which feels like a type of rubber. Along with the
zipper, the front of the jacket has storm flaps on either side of the
zipper which closes with both Velcro and snaps to ensure water does
not leak in.
### Edit: Instead of "Along with the zipper", I believe "over the
zipper" would sound better. In fact the sentence could use a little
reorganization, as it sounds very wordy and the point is somewhat
lost in the wordiness. Something like "Over the zipper are storm
flaps on each side that close with both Velcro and snaps to ensure
water does not leak in." would make the same point in a simpler
The inner storm flap creased to funnel water down the jacket and also
ensures water does not go through the zipper.
### Edit/comment: Do you mean the inner storm flap *is* creased?
This seems a little odd. Where is it creased? Does the outer flap
not keep the water out?
And it works as well as they had hoped because after over 50 hikes it
has kept me dry!
The drawcord on the hood can be operated with one hand, and I found
this easy to operate even with large gloves on. It is anchored in
place to facilitate one hand tightening of the hood in addition to an
adjustable Velcro strap on top for added customization. The drawcord
hood also has an extended visor that keeps rain off my face.
### Edit: Again awkward wording that makes it difficult to envision
what you are trying to say. Does the drawcord have a Velcro strap,
or does the hood have a Velcro strap? Try to make sure that the
words you include in each sentence are describing only the feature
you are writing about at that time. Each feature should have at
least a separate sentence so that it is properly described.
The drawcord on the bottom of the jacket operates similarly to the
one for the hood, allowing for single hand operation and can easily
be tightened with a gloved hand and has a rubber stop to keep the
adjustment in place.
### Edit: How about moving the description of the rubber stop either
to another sentence or to the beginning of this one to make the
sentence structure less awkward. I.E. The drawcord on the bottom of
the jacket has a rubber stop to keep the adjustment in place. It
operates similar to the one for the hood, allowing for single hand
operation and can easily be tightened with a gloved hand.
The tighter you pull the elastic the tighter the jacket will fit
around your waist or hips.
### EDIT: Re-word to avoid using the words "you" and "your". This
is something we really watch around here, as it often projects your
experience onto the reader. We strive to keep our reports firmly in
the first person experience, and avoiding words like `you' and your'
helps a lot with this.
The inside of the collar has a microfleece layer to go against my
chin. This is much better than Gortex against this area and was very
comfortable when I used it in temperatures in very windy and rainy
###: Edit: This sentence either is lacking something or the
word `temperatures' is extra. Please re-word so it makes sense.
Rain beads off of this jacket better than any other I have seen and
is not as hot to wear as similar products I have tried. The mesh
liner inside this jacket keeps it from sticking when you work up a
sweat and provides some circulation to keep me from overheating. The
other pockets are well lined and roomy. The jacket has a good skin
feel and breathability, and has been exceptional at keeping the rain
off; the hood covers well enough. This is a very lightweight jacket
and the most rugged and comfortable Gortex jacket I have worn to date.
### Edit: This whole section really is more of a summary, so it
should be moved to the summary section. Make sure that you remove
anything that would be redundant with what's already there. Specific
edits on this paragraph follow.
Rain beads off of this jacket better than any other I have seen and
is not as hot to wear as similar products I have tried.
and *it* is not as hot
The mesh liner inside this jacket keeps it from sticking when you
work up a sweat and provides some circulation to keep me from
### Edit: avoid using the word "you".
The other pockets are well lined and roomy.
### Edit: Do you mean "outer" instead of "other"?
The jacket has a good skin feel and breathability, and has been
exceptional at keeping the rain
off; the hood covers well enough.
### Edit: The last thought just seems stuck in there. Can you make
it a separate sentence and go into a little more detail. Do you wish
it covered better? Is it a little too shallow, or why do you
say "well enough" instead of "well"?
### EDIT: This is a double title. Choose one or the other Product
Review sounds like it better fits what you follow it with. You
actually do need a "Field Conditions" section though, which would be
nice right before this section. We need a brief description of
approximately how many times you have used the jacket, a few
locations, and general range of temperatures and elevations.
I have had the opportunity to wear this jacket tons since I lead
hikes each Sat and Sunday and I average 25-30 miles of hiking over
each weekend. My results are as follows.
### Edit: This sentence would go well in the Field Conditions
description. Leave out "My results are as follows", because you
should then have another section that is titled "Product Review"
where the rest will go.
I wear this jacket three seasons, fall, winter, and spring as I do
not wear rain gear when it is hot outside as I enjoy the refreshing
rain when it is over 90 F (32.22 C) !
### EDIT: Instead of a comma after seasons, you should use either a
dash or semi-colon. This sentence can also go in the "Field
### Comment: using the word "as" twice to change thoughts sounds
awkward. You might change one of them to "since".
In the fall when temperatures ranged from 40-55 F (6.67-12.78 C), I
wore this jacket when I needed
protection from wind and rain. It definantly lived up to its name.
### EDIT: I believe you mean it *definitely* lived up to its name.
I believe this was due to the mesh liner of the jacket which allows
for some ventilation and keeps the jacket from sticking to my sweater
body after hiking 15 miles (24.15 km).
### EDIT: I believe you mean *sweaty* body.
Over the winter I used this as mandatory gear for every hike. When
the temperature was below 20 my base layer was a mid weight Polar
Tech long underwear top followed by a non cotton short sleeve hiking
shirt and then a 300 fleece and my jacket as the outer most layer.
### EDIT: Need `F' after 20 and need the metric conversion. Also I
believe you mean "Polartec" top?
When I needed to shed after I heated up after a few miles on the
trail I would shed the fleece and be very comfortable in just the
long underwear and light hiking shirt under the jacket.
### Comment: Re-using the same words gives a redundant sound to this
sentence. Maybe substitute `remove' for one of the `sheds'. You
also have the same problem with `after', and might consider some re-
This is the ultimate outer layer for my winter hiking clothes. No
matter what Mother Nature threw my way my jacket kept me comfortable.
The jacket is extremely rugged as I wore it wile bouldering on a
mountain peak which required sliding along several large boulders
which has torn other jackets in the past.
### EDIT: spelling of "while".. The last part is worded awkwardly.
I think you might be better off to address the fact that other
jackets have torn while you were bouldering in a separate sentence.
In the spring I keep the jacket in my day-packet and if on overnight
trips in my backpack.
### Comment: I think you mean daypack?
Its compact size makes it very easy to pack and locate within my
### Comment: The compact size makes it easy to locate? Or is there
another reason it is easy to locate, such as the feel or color?
The pockets I have found in the field to be large enough to
facilitate even my two way Garmin radio/GPS/NOAA weather radio which
had been too large to fit in my other jacket pockets.
### Edit: more awkward wording. Try to form your sentences so that
the structure makes better sense. As written, you are basically
saying you found the pockets in the field, while what you mean is
that you found the pockets large enough to hold your Garmin. Also,
the pockets don't facilitate the radio. Their size might
facilitate `holding' the radio.
All in all I have worn this jacket for hundreds if not close to a
thousand miles and I yet to be disappointed by it and I am a
difficult hiker to pleas as I expect equipment to live up to its
### Edit: This would better be broken up into two sentences or at
least use some punctuation to separate the two thoughts, and should
be part of the summary.
Simply put, the L. L. Bean Stowaway Rainwear Jacket with Gore-Tex has
become a staple in my hiking wardrobe. It's lightweight yet very
rugged design is perfect for year around wear and the convenience of
the jacket stowing in its own pocket keeps me from having to keep up
with a separate stuff sack or trying to fold or roll it up and find a
place for it in my daypack or backpack.
### Comment: Your summary contradicts your review, since you state
here that you use it year around, but state earlier you don't use it
Things I like about this jacket:
Completely water and windproof as guaranteed by the manufacturer
Stows in its own pocket in just seconds
Rugged enough for rock climbing and bouldering, even slipping on
leaves on the trail and falling on my tushy too!
even *for* slipping on leaves
Things I don't like about this jacket
The double zippers can sometimes be tricky to line up but after
using the jacket a few times I got this down.
### Comment: Do you mean it has two zippers, or that it has double
zipper heads? You did not talk about this feature earlier. It
really should be described in the body of the report.
Since the jacket does not have armpit zippers, when warn in hotter
temperature as a rain jacket it can be a little hot.
### EDIT: when *worn* in hotter *temperatures*. I'd also like to
see "as a rain jacket" left out.
I stick to
wearing this jacket only in months it is important to me to stay
dry. This is a personal preference as I enjoy the rain in the heat
when it is not a danger to me. Other people might not find this to
be a problem as I hear almost any rain jacket gets pretty warm
although Goretex does breathe more than any other fabric I have tried.
### EDIT: Remove the reference to what other people might think as
that is projection.