Re: EDIT/Approval: Mountain Hardwear Phantom +15 Sleeping Bag - Peter Spiller
Thanks for all the help on this Owner Review. I took your advice, and
went through and edited the commas, and was surprised as to how much
extraneous punctuation I had added.
I would like to explain my reasoning for the internal links, as I feel
they are a valuable addition for many readers. While the links do
nothing for someone who is reading the document in a linear fashion
(as you indicated), the do not hurt the readability. The addition of
HTML (internal links) to the document allows for so much more. I am
one of those readers who does not often read reviews in a linear
manner and use the links on the top of the page to get to the
information I am most interested in. I usually read the field reports
first, and often wonder what the conditions were like during the trip
I am reading. I then scroll up to the field conditions section to get
this info, and then scroll back to the field report. I then will then
read the product description, and wonder how similar the tester is ,in
dimension, to me. I will scroll to the bio section to find out. By
anticipating these needs, and using internal links to make it easier
to navigate a document in a non-linear manner while maintaining the
linear formatting of the document, you will serve more readers.
This is the beauty of the format of the reviews in backpackgeartest.org.
Thank again for all the help.
--- In BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com, "Roger Caffin" <r.caffin@...>
> EDIT/Approval: Mountain Hardwear Phantom +15 Sleeping Bag - Peter
> Hi Peter
> OK, pretty good. I have a couple of comments for you to consider, after
> which you are clear to upload this OR to
> You still have a few redundant commas scattered through the text.
> cause real problems, but perhaps you could go through the text and askwon't be.
> yourself at each one whether it is really necessary. Very often it
> (Common problem actually.)have
> You use 'pull cord' in several places. This is OK, although I would
> written 'pull-cord' myself. This is a style issue and is entirely upto you
> however: it is not an edit requirement.line. It
> In the HTML under biography you have blank lines between each text
> would be nice if you could remove these. Ditto for ProductInformation, and
> indeed in a few other places between sections. Again, this is'nice', not
> Personally, I question the need for the internal URLs under User
> I am not sure they contribute anything as the reader will havealready been
> through the Field Locations section. Again, this is only a comment,not a
> requirement. We are happy to have YOUR style in your ORs.
> > Its 800-fill power down in encased in
> EDIT: is encased
> > interior of the bag features a down filled draft collar near the neck
> Edit: down-filled
> Roger Caffin
> BGT EDitor