EDIT: Owner Review Black Diamond Powerstretch Gloves
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> I backpacked a few times in high school and college, but only gotEDIT: Bios must be 100 words or less. You only need to delete 8
> "into it" (ok, I'm a little obsessed) in the last few months. I'm a
> busy seminary student, but whenever we can, Siu Yin (my wife) and I
> hike in Kentucky's Red River Gorge. We have a lot of trips planned
> next year, including leading a bunch of youth for a week-long trip,
> and several week-longs and weekends in various national parks next
> August. Being relatively new, we're still figuring out all the ropes
> and trying to cut our weight, but right now I normally pack between
> 40-55lbs, and Siu Yin does 30-35.
words here, not bad! I suggest you start with "and Siu Yin does 30-
35). Since it is YOUR bio, it's not relevant. Also, you need the
metric conversion for your 40-55 lb.
> Measured Weight: 4 oz (?? g)EDIT: You need the metric conversion.
>They are made from midweightEDIT: Other manufacturers are not mentioned by name.
> Polartec powerstretch, which is the same stuff Patagonia uses for
> Capilene 4.
Change "Patagonia" to "other manufacturers" or something like that.
> The first pair I used, which was a medium, had noproblems.
> problems whatsoever, but after deciding that it was too small and
> exchanging it with REI by mail for a large, I had some minor
EDIT: Ditto for naming retailers. Remember you are not reviewing
the store. Just change "REI" to "a retailer".
> I have used these gloves in temperatures from the teens to thelater),
> seventies, in long treks in Isle Royale, the Great Smokey Mountains,
> and Hawaii Volcanoes (till they developed a hole--more on that
> on shorter hikes in the Red River Gorge, as well as on an almostdaily
> basis during the Fall and Winter and found these gloves to be greatEDIT: Whoa! That is one long sentence! Please re-word and break it
up into two or three of sentences. I'd leave the whole "till they
developed..." out. You need metric conversions for your
temperatures. If you use words, as you did here, you still need to
indicate you are referring to temperatures measured Fahrenheit and
then put the metric equivalent in also. Do you mean "Hawaii
Volcanoes National Park"? If so, please write out the whole name.
> <<HYPERLINK GOES HERE - "http://www.bdel.com/gear/powerstretch.php"EDIT: You need to delete this link. BGT does not allow such links.
> LINK TEXT = "Black Diamond">>
Only the manufacturer's home page link is allowed so dead link don't
develope in the ORs or test reports when a manufacturer "moves
around" or deletes one of their pages.
conservatively rates these gloves at
> -2/7 C or 30/40 F (though I'm not sure whethe they mean whileEDIT: The correct spelling is "whether"
> exercising, or while resting).
While they are not the warmest gloves
> worn on their own, as long as you keep moving while hiking/packing,I
> think these gloves are warm enough for temperatures down to midteens
> to low 20s (about -12 to -5 C).EDIT: Ah, the dreaded "you" word! Please change to "I" to reflect
your own experiences and not projection onto the reader. Also,
please add "Fahrenheit" to your temperatures.
Despite temperatures that dropped into
> the teens at night and in the early morning, I found these gloveswere
> the way to go while packing in the Smokies.EDIT: Temperature conversions needed.
They provided whole-day
> comfort, except at night, when I would pull on my Snowlines--exceptEdit: This sentence is too long and very confusing. Can you please
> for more delicate camp chores like bear-bagging where it was way too
> cold for these gloves, but they were way better than nothing.
break it up? Also, leave out the brand name "Snowlines".
> perennially cold-digited wife reports that as long as she stayedEDIT: Delete this sentence. The OR is to reflect your experiences.
> moving, she never found her hands to be cold.
My OR Snowline are
> wearable with these liners (though your mileage may vary, they arenot
> for my wife), but I found that they are too constricting together,and
> that the additional insulation does not make up for the loss ofEDIT: Delete references to your wife - it's your review only. Also,
refer to your other mittens or gloves as just that "my usual pair of
mittens/gloves are wearable..."
(An additional note: I think it is a feature of
> insulation in general, but if you are either doing somethinggloves
> low-aerobic like driving a car, or are on a shorter trip, these
> will equally keep in the cold for awhile. Once you move a little,EDIT: Projection here. You need to eliminate the word "you" from
> these babies warm up real fast however.)
your OR vocabulary.
> While hiking in Isle Royale, I was getting blisters with myimprovised
> walking stick, so I pulled them on in day temperatures in the high50s
> to low 70s (15-21 C) and voila, no more blisters and comfortable andEDIT: You need to add "F" or "Fahrenheit".
> dry hands.
In terms of the upper limit of the comfort range of these
> gloves, I found them comfortable while hiking in the 60s (15-20EDIT: You need to add "F" or "Fahrenheit". OK, I'm not going to
> C)--once it reached the low to mid 70s (22-24 C) they began to get
continue to post this edit. Any where you have a measurement, you
must have a corresponding abbreviation and a metric conversion.
> These gloves are supposed to be wind-resistant (according toTEXT
> <<HYPERLINK GOES HERE - "http://www.rei.com/product/741972" LINK
> = "REI">> at least), but they use that term rather loosely as youwill
> feel anything more significant than a puff.EDIT: Delete the link and unless the manufacturer, on either their
website or the glove labels, says they are wind-resistant, delete the
whole sentence. If they are, in fact, reported to be wind-resistant,
keep the sentence, but re-word to avoid "you" and projection. Make
the sentence reflect your own experiences.
With significant wind however, be warned that they chill very
> very fast, so keep your breaks short, or your shell gloves handy.EDIT: Re-word to elimenate "your".
> Any glove will limit your ability to use your fingers somewhat.EDIT: Re-word to eliminate "your".
> However, with adequate patience and dexterity I think that mostshould
> be able to do virtually any camp chore in these gloves.EDIT: OK, you didn't use "you" but you are still projecting here by
telling the reader what they should be able to do. In an OR, you
can't do that. You can only relate your own experience with the
> leather is sticky, and nice if you had something slippery to hang onEDIT: PROJECTION. You need to re-word this whole section to reflect
> to. As you might expect, the grip of the fingers is just ok as the
> material is a bit slippery, but it works fine for most tasks. In
> warmer temperatures, you may find that it is faster to take them off
> and do your laces. It would be nice to have an all-leather grip, but
> you would compromise comfort on the fingers a little, but still
> something that Black Diamond should consider perhaps.
your own experience.
Siu Yin's pair is better, for
> whatever reason--possibly she's just gentler!EDIT: Delete.
I've only washed these
> gloves 2 or 3 times, so you might hope for better.EDIT: Projection.
After another year
> or so of use, the piling will certainly only get worse.EDIT: Ditto, projection. It probably will get worse, but you don't
know for sure.
These gloves are so good
> however, that I am returning mine to REI for a new pair in the hopeEDIT: Change "REI" to "the retailer" or "the store".
> that the next pair lasts a little longer.
I notice that Black Diamond also sells two
> other versions with thicker and thinner Powerstretch: Inner Core,and
> Thinner Core--as well as a windblocking fleece glove, the Jetstream,EDIT: You can mention the other models, but you can't tell the
> so I'm sure one of those will fit your needs.
reader that one of them will fit your needs. Projection.
We tried like10
> different liner-type gloves at REI and we liked these best.EDIT: "REI", again. Also, change "we" to "I" to reflect your own
> when buying these kind of things I have to say that there is noEdit: I think you should delete the whole "(even if...) part. But
> substitute for going to the store and trying them on (even if you go
> home and buy them online).
if you decide to leave it, re-word so you are not projecting.
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