EDIT: Marmot Swallow 2P - Luke Winkler
Yeah, MUCH better! Thanks.
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> Marmot Swallow 2P (2004)
EDIT: To fit in with our preferred format, please could you make this heading:
'Owner Review - Marmot Swallow 2P Tent'
> Height: 6'2" (1.88m)
EDIT: needs some <space> characters:
6' 2" (1.88 m)
> Weight: 155 pounds (70 kg)
EDIT: 155 lb (70 kg)
> Backpacking Background: I've been familiar with camping for my entire
EDIT: we do have a limit of 100 words for this. Yours is 107. Could you squeeze it a fraction please, down to the magic
> Vestibule area: 10 sq ft / 0.9 sq m
EDIT: we would like a little more info for a tent, one of the more complex things to review. Actual floor dimensions
(L*W) and inside height are definitely required, so people get some idea of the floor shape and length. Side-wall height
on the bathtub floor would please many too.
> Type of poles: DAC FeatherLite 8.84mm
EDIT: 8.84 mm with space
> Snag free zipper flap zip and un-zip without getting the zipper caught
Edit: it isn't clear whether you are quoting manufacturer's features verbatim, or paraphrasing, or making your own list.
If you are quoting we would prefer you said so - that's OK, we just want to know. My concern here is that you say
'without getting the zipper caught', but I don't know whether this is a claim by Marmot, which would need verifying, or
your experience. This sort of distinction is crucial to BGT.
> Optional footprint extra protection under your tent or for Bare Bones
EDIT: 'your' is only acceptable if quoting - several places.
> DAC Featherlite poles provide excellent strength to weigth ratio
> Jingle-free nylon zipper pulls promote undisturbed sleep
Comment: Clearly marketing crap - but some of the more imaginitive crap I have seen for ages.
> The weather varied from subzero to 80 degrees. I've
EDIT: you need metric conversions on the temperatures everywhere. You should use :
'80 F ( 27 C)' as the format.
> (30mph). This is the first true backpacking tent I have owned,
EDIT: and metric here too - but not too much precision of course.
> as the 4 season/expedition tents, the swallow has held it's
EDIT: 'Swallow' I think? Several places - not all flagged.
> own in everything I've thrown at it, from stargazing on a warm clear
Comment: YOU threw at it, or Huey threw at it? :-)
> The other negative
> (which is related I believe) is the tendency for the straps which hold
> the fly down (1/2" nylon webbing) to slip a bit when wet thereby
> causing the fly to sag under the rain.
Comment: this may not actually be correct. We do know that nylon will expand/stretch when it gets cold and wet - strange
as that may seem. I suspect that is what is happening here, rather than the webbing slipping.
> I've slept in only a pair shorts (and two tent mates)
EDIT: this should be:
"I've slept in only a pair OF shorts (and WITH two tent mates)"
> and was quite comfortable (however I deal with cold well. I also spent
EDIT: I think you are missing a closing bracket here?
> Little to no condensation with two of us in the tent,
Comment: often this way when there is some wind.
> (but I did have to tighten the fly as it slipped a little under the
> ice weight).
Comment: as above re nylon.
> Overall the marmot swallow holds up well in
EDIT: caps: Marmot Swallow, several other places as well
> Pros: Everything I've mentioned above
Edit: if the list following is meant to recap the above, OK, otherwise you do need to list them out.
> Versatile, roomy (often we sleep 3 -- myself, my 6'2" 175lb friend,
> and my 5'8" 215 lb friend)
EDIT: metric, and spaces
> there is not quite enough if you guy out the tent at every point)
EDIT: change the 'you' please
> Cons: Some fly sagging/slipping
Edit: note comments above re nylon
> Nylon sleeves for fly vents seem to wear farily easily,
> While the tent is roomy, the walls are steep and make in a little
EDIT: and make IT a little ...
> I didn't like the burrito stuff sack for storage or clipped inside
Edit: ????? I thought a burrito was Mexican food???
> model now. If you want one tent for everything, I would recommend the
EDIT: change the 'you'
> wide open and setting up solo in a rainstorm, which led to a wet tent.
EDIT: I am sure the tent would have got wet if it was raining. Do you mean rain got inside?