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Re: EDIT/APPROVAL: OWNER REVIEW - OR NIMBUS SOMBRERO - R. Lyon

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  • richardglyon
    Steve, I wondered about using anyone but figured it was simple thermodynamics and had to be accurate. I have made that change and the others you listed, and
    Message 1 of 4 , Mar 30, 2006
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      Steve, I wondered about using "anyone" but figured it was simple
      thermodynamics and had to be accurate. I have made that change and
      the others you listed, and uploaded the review. Thanks for the kind
      words. Richard
      --- In BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com, "nazdarovye"
      <nazdarovye@...> wrote:
      >
      > Richard -
      >
      > Excellent job; just a few trivial edits, noted below, so I'm
      approving
      > your review for upload as long as you take care of those.
      >
      > Be sure to upload and test your review in BGT's test folder to
      verify
      > your html. When all looks good, you may post your review here:
      >
      > Reviews > Clothing > Hats > OR Nimbus Sombrero
      >
      > As always, click "Owner Review" and take it from there.
      >
      > Thanks for a fine review!
      >
      > Regards,
      > Steve
      > BGT Edit Moderator
      >
      > [EDITS FOLLOW:]
      >
      > Materials and Features: "Waterproof/breathable, 3-layer 50D ripstop
      > Ventia™ fabric, seam taped; Leno mesh/foam-stiffened brim floats;
      > flexible, circumferential piping; Mesh-lined crown and Coolmax®
      mesh
      > headband for comfort and moisture management; External drawcord
      > adjustment; Snaps on brim and dome; Removable chin cord with
      cordlock."
      > ***EDIT: "CoolMax" (though I do see it's a quote from somewhere
      else,
      > you did use the correct form later in your review; if this is
      exactly
      > how it stood on the original source, I'd say it's fine to leave it
      as is).
      >
      > Except for my dry flies' getting soaked,
      > ***EDIT COMMENT: I personally don't think the apostrophe is
      necessary,
      > but if you consider it a style issue, leave as is.
      >
      > Anyone will perspire more when
      > wearing any hat than bareheaded, of course, but under these
      conditions
      > the Nimbus hasn't increased perspiration to a point that it – or I
      > – can't handle.
      > ***EDIT: Minor, minor edging into projection here; consider taking
      out
      > the "Anyone..." clause. You could simply say "I perspire more..."
      and
      > have the sentence work just fine.
      >
      > [END OF EDITS]
      >
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