Re: EDIT/APPROVAL: OWNER REVIEW - OR NIMBUS SOMBRERO - R. Lyon
- Steve, I wondered about using "anyone" but figured it was simple
thermodynamics and had to be accurate. I have made that change and
the others you listed, and uploaded the review. Thanks for the kind
--- In BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com, "nazdarovye"
> Richard -
> Excellent job; just a few trivial edits, noted below, so I'm
> your review for upload as long as you take care of those.verify
> Be sure to upload and test your review in BGT's test folder to
> your html. When all looks good, you may post your review here:mesh
> Reviews > Clothing > Hats > OR Nimbus Sombrero
> As always, click "Owner Review" and take it from there.
> Thanks for a fine review!
> BGT Edit Moderator
> [EDITS FOLLOW:]
> Materials and Features: "Waterproof/breathable, 3-layer 50D ripstop
> Ventia fabric, seam taped; Leno mesh/foam-stiffened brim floats;
> flexible, circumferential piping; Mesh-lined crown and Coolmax®
> headband for comfort and moisture management; External drawcordcordlock."
> adjustment; Snaps on brim and dome; Removable chin cord with
> ***EDIT: "CoolMax" (though I do see it's a quote from somewhereelse,
> you did use the correct form later in your review; if this isexactly
> how it stood on the original source, I'd say it's fine to leave itas is).
> Except for my dry flies' getting soaked,
> ***EDIT COMMENT: I personally don't think the apostrophe is
> but if you consider it a style issue, leave as is.conditions
> Anyone will perspire more when
> wearing any hat than bareheaded, of course, but under these
> the Nimbus hasn't increased perspiration to a point that it or Iout
> can't handle.
> ***EDIT: Minor, minor edging into projection here; consider taking
> the "Anyone..." clause. You could simply say "I perspire more..."and
> have the sentence work just fine.
> [END OF EDITS]