Looks like a good letter. In the interest of putting our best foot forward,
there are a couple of minor edits I would suggest...
(If you're not interested, delete this email now. :-)
In the first sentence, just use "clear picture" rather than "clearer".
Also, I recommend three more paragraph breaks - one, just before "Our main
purpose here..." - another just before "While I don't necessarily expect
professional..." - and the last just before "If you are not interested..."
There are also some typos that I saw: In the fourth sentence, manufactures
should be manufacturers; in the fifth sentence, your should be you; and in
the second paragraph, two instances of manor should be manner. Spell
checkers just can't catch everything.
I do a bit of this type of editing for work so it's just habit to find the
little niggling typos that just love to sneak into our writing.
I hope this helps and I look forward to participating in the upcoming gear
Thank you for pulling all of this together.
>From: "Gear Tester" <geartester@...>
>Subject: [BackpackGearTest] Fw: New Greeting
>Date: Tue, 30 Jan 2001 00:40:11 -0700
>----- Original Message -----
>From: Gear Tester
>Sent: Monday, January 29, 2001 10:59 PM
>Subject: New Greeting
>This is the new message every new lister will receive upon joining the
>Welcome to BackpackGearTest. I would like to take this opportunity to give
>you a clearer picture of what we do here and how it works. We do not give
>away free gear here. The purpose of this list is to trade our input and
>product exposure for the gear we receive from the manufactures. If you
>receive gear through this list your will be expected to post the required
>reviews in the time frame expected and in an organized and intelligible
>format. You will be free to make any comments you like, in good taste, as
>long as you substantiate your findings be they good, bad, or indifferent.
>The people on this list will discuss your findings and, I hope, ask you
>questions about them. Our main purpose here is to put out unbiased reviews
>in a setting that encourages discussion about those reviews both among
>ourselves and with the people that made them. Your reports will be uploaded
>to our file section for future reference. If you see reviews of equipment
>here that you own or have used I encourage you to upload your comments
>about either the review process or the piece of gear in question to the
>Non-Tester Comments folder that will accompany every test series.
>Requests (I call them applications) will be periodically posted to the list
>calling for testers for each piece of gear to be reviewed. You must apply
>for each individual test series. You will not be allowed to participate in
>more than one test at a time nor in two successive tests. You will be
>expected to use the gear in the manor in which the manufacturer intended.
>If you do not feel that you have the time or inclination to do the reports
>in a timely manor or to put forth a good faith effort in the reviews please
>do not apply for the gear. This is not a gear lottery. It is a serious
>forum for the review of gear that many of us would not have an opportunity
>to see any other way short of putting down our hard earned money and hoping
>for the best. While I don't necessarily expect professional quality writing
>in your reviews I do expect you to write clearly and at reasonable length
>about the gear, how and where you used it, and the results of that use. I
>expect you to own a spell checker and to use it. The manufacturers are free
>to quote our reviews and to use our names in any promotions they may do as
>long as we are correctly quoted both as to actual content and intent. If
>you are not interested in reviewing the gear presented here you are welcome
>to set back and enjoy the free flow of information about it. Pass the word
>about this list and the information contained in it to any other lists to
>which you subscribe. The more people we have on this list the more interest
>the manufacturers will have in us. Enjoy
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