Re: Under Owner Review - Hex 3 edit - Tim Todd
- Good Morning Colleen,
Don't stress over the OR, just relax and enjoy yourself. I am in no hurry and am sure it will
get done when it gets done.
--- In BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com, "Emma Eyeball" <tarbubble@y...> wrote:
> hi! i'm in charge of editing your OR for the Hex 3. i apologize for
> taking so long to get it edited. between the holidays & my
> computer/connection problems, i have fallen way behind. i will have
> it edited this week. again, i apologize and thank you for your patience.
- Hi Tim,
here are your edits. you have taken a somewhat unique approach in
your OR with the section at the end, and i like what you've done. you
just need a little sculpting. once you have incorporated the edits,
re-post your OR and we'll go from there. thanks so much!
> Weight: 182 lb (82.5 k)edit: the proper abbreviation for kilograms is "kg."
> Backpacking Background:edit: your biography is 121 words. the maximum is 100.
> every Sunday is reserved for a wilderness hike where daily life isedit: "allowed to interrupt."
> not allowed interrupt. I try to get away for 3 days two times a
> Area: 65 sq ft (6m2)edit: (6 m2)
> FEATURES:question: are you quoting the features directly from GoLite's site?
there's nothing wrong with that, but if you are you need to mention it.
> MANUFACTURER'S DESCRIPTION:edit: we want to hear YOUR description. we have very few ironclad
rules, but one of them is that you must have a paragraph titled
"Product Description," and that it must be your description, not the
> FIELD INFORMATION:edit: in your Field Conditions section, you must include altitude,
> LOCATIONS USED:
> * Olympic National Forest, Washington State
> o Terrain varies from snow to rocky.
> * Bitterroot National Forest, Montana
> o The terrain was 8 inches of snow.
> * Mt. Hood, Oregon
> o Terrain was either snow or soft soil.
temperature ranges (approximates are OK, but of course the more
accurate the better), terrain, and weather conditions.
>comment: i own three single-pole shelters - one with a square
> First Use:
> All new gear I get is always tested at home first on my seven
> wooded acres. The incident was quite uneventful. All corners were
> staked out, the pole set in place, and there it was just like in the
> picture. Very simple except for one detail - I have yet to achieve a
> perfectly round base. Maybe my eyes are crooked, I don't know.
> Fortunately the lack of perfect roundness is only aesthetic and in no
> way a hindrance to its performance.
footprint, one with an oval, and one with a circle. yes, i'm a big
fan of this shelter type! it is nigh on to impossible to get them
pitched symmetrically. you're not alone.
> Once I was satisfied and confident about the Hex 3, we venturededit: your second sentence is incomplete. i would suggest combining
> into the wilderness on a partly sunny day. My wife, two dogs and I.
the two sentences like so: "...about the Hex 3, my wife, two dogs and
I ventured into..."
> The tent setup just like at home.edit: "set up."
My wife was happy but concerned
> about the "no floor" feature. I use tarps a lot when camping solo andedit #1: start your new paragraph with "However, she still prefers..."
> the Hex 3 was meant to bridge a gap between tent and tarp that my
> wife would approve of since she prefers a tent. She was happily
> surprised. We all had more than enough room and slept comfortably.
> However, she still prefers a traditional tent with "no-seeum" mesh.
> That meant purchasing the Hex 3 Nest Inner Tent that is all
> mesh with a floor and an additional 2 pounds 6 ounces to the weight
> of the entire Hex 3 package. All in all it's a small price to pay to
> keep my significant other happy. In an effort to compromise in the
> weight category, we now use the Golite Trig 2 shelter. I usually
> reach for the Hex 3 when traveling with friends and in the winter.
edit #2: "That meant purchasing the Hex 3 Nest Inner Tent, which is
all mesh with a coated nylon floor, and which adds an additional 2
pounds..." sorry, that was multiple edits in one. your sentence
needed a bit of re-construction and i really think you need to specify
that the Nest also has a nylon floor.
> Second Use and Beyond:suggestion: i would re-word this to say "...my needs when camping with
> I am a believer in the teepee design. Its ability to offer
> height and huge floor space is perfect for my camping needs
> consisting of canines.
canines." the original phrasing just seems a bit unwieldy.
> help some, in order to be effective, they need to be even larger. Icomment: thanks for including your personal take/opinion on
> am not bothered by condensation; it is nature and part of the
condensation. it's too often perceived as a negative or as something
that can be eliminated with more perfect design (whatever that is).
> Condensation as never dripped on me, water has never filled theedit #1: "Condensation has never dripped..."
> floor, and snow has never crept inside - With the exception of what
> my dogs' drug inside.
edit #2: "inside - with the exception of what my dogs dragged in."
> claim yet. Is it for everyone? No. If given a chance I am positive itsuggestion: "No, but if given a chance I am positive it would appeal
> would appeal to more hikers though.
to more hikers."
All too often we categorize
> everything as positive or negative. I don't like doing that becausesuggestion: i would eliminate the apologetic tone. instead, why don't
> in most cases a person's con is actually another's pro. I will list a
> few traits in given situations so that a person can make an educated
> decision about this product.
> It is especially vital to realize that lightweight gear demands
> knowledgeable responsibility of how, when, and where the gear can be
> used. The Golite Hex 3 is lightweight gear so use caution and respect
> for nature when using this shelter. As with all single walled
> shelters the Hex 3 works best when a person understands the nature of
> condensation so I would highly recommend studying this subject. I
> have tried to list everything I have experienced in this shelter but
> I may have forgotten something. If so, I am sorry.
you say something like "here is a sampling of conditions I have used
the Hex 3 in, and my experiences and thoughts on them"?
> Early In The Morning:edit: "As long as an individual has not camped in a low stagnant area..."
> * As long as and individual have not camped in a low stagnate
> area or near water there will be no or very little condensation.
question: when you say "stagnant," what exactly do you mean? to me,
"stagnant" implies foul water. This makes the sentence seem a bit
> A Wet Night:edit: you are missing a period.
> * There will be some condensation so camp and sleep in a way
> that will minimize it. Ventilation, ventilation, ventilation
> * Remember the tent is a cone shape, when the door is unzipped,edit: this sentence is confusing. i see what you are saying but your
> which is bottom to top; the center of the tent is exposed to rain.
punctuation choices are distracting from your meaning. maybe:
"Remember the tent is a cone shape. When the door is unzipped, from
the bottom up to the top, the center of the tent is then exposed to rain."
> * Remember the tent is a cone shape, when the door is unzipped,edit: same as the prior edit.
> which is bottom to top; the center of the tent is exposed to snow.
> * Tap the side of the tent to let snow slide down beforecomment: you should check out this trip report i just saw. one of
> opening the door.
> * Wide snow stake or snow anchors are imperative in setting the
> tent up.
the folks on the trip used a Hex in an insane storm. here's a link:
> * It is a single walled shelter, there is absolutely noquestion: are you talking about the Nest again, or the Hex 3 Floor?
> insulating value to the tent - It will be cold unless the proper gear
> is utilized.
> * The optional footprint works wonders, I highly recommend it.
just be sure to use the proper name, to minimize confusion.