EDIT: Mountain House Backpacking Foods - Jennifer Williams
- EDIT: Mountain House Backpacking Foods - Jennifer Williams
I had some reservations about this OR. It seems to me that you have
only tried each meal once, and I was wondering whether that is really
enough to be able to write a good review. Some of the other food
reviews recently were based on far more use than this. However, the
concensus of the Editors was that you have tried three meals and
there were no negatives, so it should be OK.
If you have used any of these more than indicated in this review, it
would be very good to add those extra occasions. Otherwise we will
fly with these three. A bit of a bare minimum, but OK.
I have a few some small edits for you to fix.
When you have done these, could you please REPOST this OR on this
channel. At the same time could you put the html version in the
Tests / Owner Reviews folder on BGT please, along with any pictures
you intend to use. We check the html version as well, for various
things like a clickable manufacturer's URL and some details of the
Some of us have an unofficial convention here:
EDIT: you must fix this
Edit: you are advised to seriously consider this
Comment: just that.
However, if you think I have got something wrong or that what I am
criticising is actually a matter of personal style, feel free to say
BGT OR Editor
> TESTER BIOEDIT: The SG does require your weight as well. It would be prefered
if you could include this.
> Listed Weight 4.7 oz (133 g)EDIT: One of the few things we do insist on is that you include both
> Prepared Serving Size: 10 oz (283 g)
the manufacturer's listed weights and dimensions and your own weights
and dimensions as well. It is not unknown for there to be some
disparity, and that's what we test.
> All of the Mountain House meals were used on a two night backpackingEDIT: I immediately went huh? here. You have listed three meals for
two nights. OK, further on you explain, but by then the reader is
confused. You could solve this very easily by writing:
'All three of the Mountain House meals were used on a two night
> The package instructs to expand the bottom of the pouch by pullingon
Edit: awkward construction. You might like to consider something like:
'The instructions are as follows. Expand the bottom of the pouch ...'
> All of the pouches stayed upright while pouring the hot water inEDIT: grammar problem. The pouches did not do the pouring. Consider
' All of the pouches stayed upright while I poured the hot water in
and re-sealed the tops without problems.'
> Thus, we ended up sticking our hands into the pouchesComment: messy - yuk! Your point later is well made.
> The Potatoes and Cheddar even turned out well despite me forgettingEDIT: 'despite my forgetting '
> a few large clumps, but after stirring them and letting them sit forEDIT: better grammar to say:
' but after I stirred them and let them sit for '
> considering that my boyfriend can eat his weight in food on a normalComment: you keep him half-starved? Shame! But a good write-up of the
size of the meals.