EDIT: Bibler Bombshelter - Richard Lyon
- EDIT: Bibler Bombshelter - Richard Lyon
Me again. :-)
I almost get the impression you like this tent!
Yes, well written and good stuff. I would dearly love a pic or two of the tent - one technical one and one of it in the
mountains. Optional of course, but so helpful.
Pretty good all around.
I have a few EDITs for you, plus some small style comments for your consideration. The latter are purely optional, but I
thought I would include them as a courtesy.
Could you REPOST here and in the Test/OR folder please when done.
BGT OR EDitor
> Pocket Pal 2 oz (57 g) 2 oz (57 g)Edit: Maybe a note here that this is explained below? My 'Pocket Pal' is a Swiss Army Knife.
> Front vestibule (trapezoidal) length (tent door to vesti door) 35Comment: my curiosity is aroused: any idea why the quoted dimensions are larger than your measurements show? If not, do
> in (90 cm) 33 in (85 cm)
> Rear vestibule (triangular) length (tent door to vesti door) 21
> in (54 cm) 20 in (52 cm)
not worry about it. We are used to these sorts of variations.
> Packed size not listed With poles, stakes, groundsheet andComment: we would love it more if you sorted such heaps of text out when converting from html to plain text. I use Note
> small repair kit: 10 x 21 x 6 in (25 x 53 x 15 cm)Tent, groundsheet,
> and repair kit: 10 x 21 x 4 in (25 x 53 x 10 cm)Poles and stakes
> only**: 20 x 5 x 3 in (51 x 13 x 8 cm)
Tab Light which does a good job of this conversion.
> **The best way to divide the tent between two backpackers is to haveEDIT: you have this sentence in two places. Only one place needed.
> one take the tent body and groundsheet and the other take the poles
> and stakes.
> slightly larger), each with separately double-zippered no-see-umEdit: I found this sentence a little awkward. You could write
'with separate double-zippered no-see-um netting'
but the choice is yours.
> Separate hook-and-loop tie-offs for each at the side of the tentEdit: I found this sentence a little awkward. You could write something like
> doors may be used to keep an opened door out of harm's way.
'Separate hook-and-loop tie-offs at the side of each tent door may be used'
but the choice is yours.
> ground cloth has loops of twine that are threaded through the cornerComment: I tend to think of 'twine' as being made of natural fibre. My bias of course. 'String' maybe? Your choice.
> Pitching the Bombshelter takes some practice and I recommend severalEdit: we normally avoid making recommendations to others.
> it must be set up must be done from the inside.EDIT: this needs rephrasing.
> Fifteen years of bending the poles made an exact fit difficult butEdit: 'has made' might be smoother here.
> by placing the ends in grommets on each side near the tent doorEDIT: change tense: placing => canting and securing. Or the other way if you wish.
> (another tight fit), cant it forward, and secure it with Velcro ties
> I first remove the poles, then the stakes (if it's windy, all butEdit: a trfle awkward. I stumbled. I offer the following:
> one corner stake on the windward side).
'I first remove the poles and then the stakes. If it's windy I remove
all but one corner stake on the windward side.'
> I then fold the vestibules over the tent body; making a large rectangle.EDIT: change ; to comma
> This I fold in half longitudinally twice; leaving a rectangleEDIT: ditto
> Random stuffing makes the sack too small.EDIT: I'm sort of lost here. The sack does not change size. Do you mean 'Random stuffing does not get the tent into the
> travelers' tent collapsed under weight of snow andEdit: a bit shorthand. Maybe 'under the weight of snow' ?
> twenty inches' (51 cm) width per person makes for tight quarters.Comment: that's the width of a Therm-a-Rest. If you can get four of them side by side, that surely ought to be enough
room? But then, I sleep snuggled up next to my wife, and that takes less room :-)