EDIT: Katadyn Hiker Water Filter - Josh Cormier
- EDIT: Katadyn Hiker Water Filter - Josh Cormier
I see you got the Test folder business sorted out. Good.
However, the only font size spec I noticed in the html was for 'size=2', and this makes all the text a bit hard to read.
Most people use at least 'size=3' or even one step up from that. Have mercy on those of us with eye problems!
I have another batch of edits for you, but we are now getting into some fine tuning. Since you are going so well I am
going to assume you would want to get the finished product to a high standard.
I like your use of specific incidents to illustrate general points. This comes across well.
Could you please Repost here and also to the same Test/OR folder. If you intend to add any pictures, please do so now. I
think you are nearly there.
BGT OR Editor
> - Height: 5’11” (1.80 m)EDIT: insert space: 5' 11"
> camping and backpacking ever since. I like to do challenging trip rangingEDIT: 'challenging trips ' (plural)
Comment: a nice tight bio.
> - Microfiltration Method: AntiClog technology: 129 square inches of pleatedEDIT: delete the marketing bit about 'AntiClog technology'.
Comment only: I was about to suggest further simplification, but I changed my mind. The word 'Microfiltration' has no
legal meaning but some of the filter companies have decided to use it for this level of filtration. I don't know whether
you are aware of this or not. I am not suggesting you change it.
> - Activated carbon core: reduces unpleasant tastes and odor from water.Edit: you might like to mention that the activated carbon strips (absorbs) chemicals from the water: this is more
important than the taste/odor bit really.
> - Claimed Cartridge Capacity: Up to 200 gallons, depending on water qualityEDIT: add metric.
> - Claimed Weight: 11 oz. (312 g)EDIT: 11 oz without the period.
> - Measured Weight: 12oz (340 g)EDIT: 12 oz (with space)
Yeah, we get a bit fussy about having all the units just right.
> - Measured Hose Length: 1at 38" (0.97 m) and 1 at 33” (0.84 m)EDIT: confusing. Can I suggest you spell it out thus:
'one 38" (0.97 m) and one 33” (0.84 m)'
> Manufactures web site: http://www.katadyn.comEdit: for consistency, how about making these 3 lines look the same as the previous ones?
> Year of Manufacture: 1995
> MSRP: $59.95
EDIT: please make the manufacturer's URL clickable.
> The hoses are two different lengths; I assume the shorterComment: your choice, but don't swap them around later! I have them the other way around, but so what?
> one goes on the bottom of the filter and the longer on the top.
> to fit over the opening of a Nalgene.EDIT: for the first use I suggest 'a Nalgene bottle'.
> This is great if you only use Nalgenes, but I was fillingComment: very good point.
> water bladders, water bags and different water bottles.
> The hose connections on the filter are slip fit with theEDIT: connections is plural while slip fit is singular. Can I suggest
'are a slip fit ' as an elegant solution?
> Flushing it with water, I washed out some sediment, put it back togetherEdit: fine tuning the grammar. Can I suggest
> and it worked!
'I washed out some sediment; then I put it back together '