[EDIT] OWNER REVIEW - Gasmate lamp [Dennis Hayman]
- Hi Dennis.
Thank you for your Owner Review. It sounds like you have evaluated an
Below you will find several edits. They may seem a bit daunting, but keep
in mind that our goal is to help you become a valuable member of the
backpackgeartest community. There is nothing personal in the editing
process, and all criticisms are intended to be constructive, and to help
to add value to your review.
What you have written is a good start on this Owner Review. The edits
below should help get this part of your review ready for posting. However,
there are a few things missing that you must have in order for this review
to meet all the requirements of backpackgeartest. What is missing are
your field conditions and the conditions in which you used the lamp. All
you have provided on that is "60 miles (100k) over some rugged terrain."
You must provide where and how you used the product. Temperatures,
elevations, weather conditions (like wind or rain) would all be pertinent
to this review. In addition to the environmental conditions, you should
add how you used the lamp. Around camp? In a shelter? Hanging from a
tree? On the ground? On a table? You get the idea. What you have is a
good description of the product, but we need to hear how you used it and
how it worked in those conditions. How long the fuel supply lasted would
also be valuable, as well as the ability to adjust the intensity of the
Once you have made changes based on my comments above and edits below,
please repost to the list with the word REPOST in the subject line. I
will take another look promptly, and provide additional editing if
necessary. Once approved you will receive specific upload instructions.
Thanks again for your hard work, Dennis.
James E. Triplett
BGT Edit Moderator
GASMATE BUTANE LAMP
[EDIT] You should have "Owner Review" or "Owner Review by Dennis Hayman"
in your header line
Height: 5ft 5in or 165 cm
[EDIT] You need a space between the value and the units, and typically
"or" is not used. I would change it to the following: 5 ft 5 in (165 cm)
Weight: 163lbs or 74kg
[EDIT] Same as above. Also, no "s" in "lb": 163 lb (74kg)
Started Backpacking late in 2004 and have now been out 4 times and covered
152 kms on various types of terrain from beach to dense forrest to hilly.
[EDIT] You should try and use complete sentences, and thus start your
sentence "I started backpacking?"
[EDIT] Backpacking should not be capitalized.
[EDIT] "kms" should be "km"
[EDIT] "forrest" should be "forest"
I am basically a weekend backpacker and addicted to it already. All of my
trekking has been done on the Bibbulmum track in Western Australia and
the weather conditions have varied from 107 farenheit (42c) to 42
farenheit (6c) over the past 6 months.
[EDIT] You have an extra space between "Australia" and "and"
[EDIT] Fahrenheit and Celsius should be capitalized (and spelled
correctly if spelled out). You also need a space after the value and
before the units. This is typically listed as follows: 107 F (42 C) to 42
F (6 C) -or- 107 to 42 F (42 to 6 C)
[EDIT] This should be listed as the "Manufacturer" rather than the brand.
You also need to list the URL, and if none is available then state so.
Weight using kitchen scales .61 lbs (.28g) inc chain,mantle
[EDIT] For fractions of pounds you should use ounces. You also need a
space after the value and before the units.
[EDIT] You have an extra space between "lbs" and "(.28g)".
[EDIT] There is a missing space between "chain," and "mantle"
[EDIT] Your conversion is into the wrong units.
[EDIT] So this should read: Weight using kitchen scale: 9.8 oz (277 g)
including chain and mantle.
Weight of protective case 0.088 lbs (.04g)
[EDIT] Extra spaces and inappropriate units. Should be: Weight of
protective case: 1.4 oz (40 g)
Frosted glass Made in West Germany
[EDIT] This should have a sub-heading, like: Product Features
Lamp Dimensions: Height 120mm
Diameter 90mm at maximum point
[EDIT] You need a space after the value and before the units. You also
need the English units. For consistency list the English units first:
Height 4.7 inch (120 mm), Diameter 3.5 inch (90 mm) at maximum point
Carry case Dimensions Height 4.92 inches (125mm)
Diameter 3.7inches (95mm)
[EDIT] Watch the extra spaces and missing spaces after the value and
before the units.
[COMMENT] I would move the dimensional information up to directly below
the weight information.
Description: This is a little beauty gas lamp.
[COMMENT] Grammar. Use either "This is a little beauty of a gas lamp."
Or "This little gas lamp is a beauty."
It comes with the self igniter and a hanging chain.
[EDIT] Replace "the" with "a"
Connection to gas bottle is of thread type and is of brass construction
with an inner and outer rubber grommet seals.
[EDIT] Missing words: Connection to [a] gas bottle is of [a] thread type
and is [made] of brass construction with an inner and outer rubber grommet
[EDIT] Remove the word "an".
There is a plastic but very robust knob for adjusting the gas flow and
ignition. Around the glass is a chrome wire cage with a flip up solid
stainless lid hinged on one side and spring clip on the other.
[EDIT] Should be "spring clipped" or "and with a spring clip"
The glass is frosted .
[EDIT] Remove the space before the period
A hanging chain is connected to either side of the wire cage and is 50
inches (600mm) in total length giving you 25 inches (300mm) in clearance
when hanging up. The chains have clips for easy removal
[EDIT] when hanging up [the lamp].
[EDIT] This seems like a very long chain?
[EDIT] 50 inch (127 cm)
[EDIT] 25 inch (63 cm)
[EDIT] Extra space between "(300mm)" and "in", missing period at the end
of the sentence.
The carry case come in a green color and has a zip
around the top for removal of the lamp.
[EDIT] Why is this paragraph indented?
[EDIT] "come" should be "comes"
[EDIT] Extra space between "around" and "the"
Inside there is a plastic sleeve to keep its shape and strength against
[EDIT] against being crushed.
On the outer there is a loop strap for attaching to your pack.
[EDIT] On the outer [side of the case] there is a loop strap for
attaching to [a] pack.
The lamp has now been out on 3 treks and traveled 60 miles (100k) over
some rugged terrain.
[EDIT] Extra space between "traveled " and "60 miles"
The carry case although very well made I have noticed the inner plastic
strengthener has parted from where it is joined to itself by two staples.
[EDIT] This doesn't read very well. Consider changing it to something
like: The carry case is very well made, however I have noticed the inner
plastic strengthener has parted from where it is joined to itself by two
The outer loop attached is a good idea but the only way to attach it is to
thread a webbing through it.
[EDIT] Consider saying: The attached outer loop is a good idea, but the
only way to attach it?
To me its more of a hand carry loop than an attachment loop. Zip fastener
on the top has to date given no trouble.
[EDIT] "its" should be "it's"
[EDIT] Reword and add the word the. [The] zip fastener on the top has
given no trouble to date.
The lamp runs on a butane/propane mix and gives of adequate light but
you do need to keep the lamp low to the ground for best lighting thus
rendering the chain not necessary as you can carry the lamp by the
bottle.The hanging chain also tends to tangle around the wire cage when in
transit in its carry case. The normal string tie mantle is still holding
together so it seems to travel quite well.
[EDIT] Extra space before the first word of the paragraph.
[EDIT] "of" should be "off"
[EDIT] Comma after "gives of adequate light" and remove extra space.
[EDIT] Missing space between "the bottle." and "The"
The lamp connection to the bottle is very strong and the sealing o rings
are good .
[EDIT] "o rings" should be "O-rings"
[EDIT] Extra space after "good"
My other walking partners are envious of my gas lamp and the weight is
minimal extra to carry but the advantages of it are great
[EDIT] Consider rewording as follows: My other walking partners are
envious of my gas lamp, and considering the minimal extra weight, the
advantages of it are great.
The Regulator for the gas flow is not as good as one would expect.
[EDIT] Make this about your experiences. Say not as good as "I" would
As you depress the igniter and open the valve to get it started you do
tend to lose a bit of gas and once going the flow of gas can vary when you
move the lamp around.
[EDIT] Again, make it about you. As "I" depress the igniter?
The GASMATE lamp is durable and compact and lightweight and gives off
[EDIT] End this line with a period.
and is economical although the gas control valve could do with some
[EDIT] New sentence. It is economical?
I would like to give this product further testing time and report on it
[EDIT] Delete this sentence.
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