EDIT: Owner Review - Eureka Timberline 2 Tent - Dave Hjelmar
- Owner Review - Eureka Timberline 2 Tent - Dave Hjelmar
Welcome. A fairly good first OR, with only a couple of specific small edits.
You write well.
However, a tent is a rather large (=expensive!) item, and I would hope to
see a bit more about the tent construction and the interior. If you are
going to include some pictures, reference to these would help enormously of
course. (Me, I think pictures are well worth while.) Think of the reader:
what else would he (she) like to know about the tent? If you need help with
working out what else to put in, just yell.
You need to fix up the metric bits of course. When you have done these, the
edits, and maybe added a bit more description, could you REPOST to the this
channel please. At the same time please put the full html version into the
Tests / Owner Reviews folder on BGT as we need to see it too.
PS: don't forget to send your signed Tester Agreement to Shane.
> Listed weight: 5 lb 13 oz (xx kg)EDIT: we would prefer you did fill these figures in before posting. Next
> Weight as purchased I know I still need to fill this in
> Weight with ground cloth I know I still need to fill this in
> Size: 5'3" x 7'2" (xx m x xx m) floor space
> 3'6" height
> Packed size 6" x 24"
> fly, door at one end, and large no-see-um windows in both the door andEDIT: 'fly, a door at one end...' (insert 'a')
> waterproof. Note I do take extremely good care of the tent. No shoesEDIT: the 'Note' here is a trifle awkward. 'Note that' would be fine, or you
could leave the word out.
Comment: I fully agree with your concept of caring for your gear! The
comments are well made.
> need shelter for two and/or temperatures are substantially belowEDIT: change of subject, so start a new paragraph at 'What I like ...'
> freezing). What I like about the Timberline most is that one person can
> Things I Don?t LikeEDIT: Don't
> SummaryEDIT: we avoid making recommendations. Keep it strictly personal - what you
> I recommend the Eureka Timberline 2 to anyone looking for an
> Name: DaveEDIT: need surname too
> Date: May 2, 2005EDIT: update
> Experience and StyleEDIT: the rule is 100 words, no more, Sad, but we all have to abide. You
don't really need to mention actual places.