Re: EDIT: Owner review - Jetboil Stove
- Roger that Jim - will rework the writing issues and repost when the
stove has been in the field a while (I did just receive it).
--- In BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com, "colonelcorn76"
> Based on the comment below (and a read of the rest of the review) it
> doesn't appear that you've got any field use with the stove. If
> the case, then you'll want to resubmit this in a few months afterIf
> you've had a chance to use it under a variety of field conditions.
> that's not the case, then you need to rework this a bit to reflectof "you", "yours", "you'll",
> your field experience with it.
> Also, you "converse" with the reader using "you", etc. in several
> places in the review. While a couple of the instances would not
> constitute projection, several others would. It would be best if you
> reworked the review to eliminate the use
> A few other things I noticed were the mixing of abbreviations & full
> spelling of measurement units (kg/pounds, etc.), and spacing issues
> between the unit & its abbreviations. Please include a space before
> all abbreviations and be consistent with your use abbreviations (or
> spell out the measurement unit).
> If you have had a few months of field use with this stove, please
> rework it as suggested above, and repost it with REPOST in the
> line so I can pick it up for another look.wrote:
> Edit Moderator
> --- In BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com, "Dan" <javaheds@k...>
> > o The initial review was conducted at my home in Okinawa