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Re: EDIT: Owner review - Jetboil Stove

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  • Dan
    Roger that Jim - will rework the writing issues and repost when the stove has been in the field a while (I did just receive it). Dan ... that s ... If ... of
    Message 1 of 6 , May 31, 2004
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      Roger that Jim - will rework the writing issues and repost when the
      stove has been in the field a while (I did just receive it).

      Dan

      --- In BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com, "colonelcorn76"
      <colonelcorn76@y...> wrote:
      > Dan,
      > Based on the comment below (and a read of the rest of the review) it
      > doesn't appear that you've got any field use with the stove. If
      that's
      > the case, then you'll want to resubmit this in a few months after
      > you've had a chance to use it under a variety of field conditions.
      If
      > that's not the case, then you need to rework this a bit to reflect
      > your field experience with it.
      >
      > Also, you "converse" with the reader using "you", etc. in several
      > places in the review. While a couple of the instances would not
      > constitute projection, several others would. It would be best if you
      > reworked the review to eliminate the use
      of "you", "yours", "you'll",
      > etc.
      >
      > A few other things I noticed were the mixing of abbreviations & full
      > spelling of measurement units (kg/pounds, etc.), and spacing issues
      > between the unit & its abbreviations. Please include a space before
      > all abbreviations and be consistent with your use abbreviations (or
      > spell out the measurement unit).
      >
      > If you have had a few months of field use with this stove, please
      > rework it as suggested above, and repost it with REPOST in the
      subject
      > line so I can pick it up for another look.
      >
      > Thanks,
      > Jim
      > Edit Moderator
      >
      >
      > --- In BackpackGearTest@yahoogroups.com, "Dan" <javaheds@k...>
      wrote:
      >
      > > o The initial review was conducted at my home in Okinawa
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