EDIT Re: ULA P-2 Initial Report
- This is only a quick edit from a tired man. I'll give it more time
tomorrow. I enjoyed the report but had a little trouble with a few
sentences. Also where is the manufactures URL. Could be a hyperlink
that will show up when uploaded in HTML? I though I heard a request
to give the link as http/:whatever.com?
I'll add, I am no editor so these comments could be wrong. I would
like for a more experienced editor to look it over. However, besides
the places I mention it looks fine to me.
--- In BackpackGearTest@y..., "David Anderson" <squtch@q...> wrote:
> I did have to move the hipbelt down a little, and a little nudge
> bottom of the pack adjusted the stay to just the right shape
> to pull the stay out of the bag.
I can't quite picture what you mean here. But I'll bet it's one of
those "you had to be there" kind of situations to understand. Leave
it or change it as you see fit.
> When I took the pack out to the trail down to Meadowdale Beach.
> experienced some sway and bouncing of the pack till I finally for
> set up just right, then everything just snapped right into place,
> stopped swaying and bouncing.
change "for" to got; could leave out then in front of "everything";
take out "comma" (not sure on this one (taking out the comma)) and
add "and" behind "place"