79741EDIT / APPROVAL - OR CAMP XLC 490 Crampons - David Wilkes
- Oct 31, 2010Hi David,
Nice Owner Review, your initial edits will follow. They will take the following format;
EDIT: must be changed
Edit: should be changed but will be left to your discretion
Comment: just that or something to think about
Once you have fixed them feel free to post your review here:
Please remember to delete your test version too.
<<Manufacturer's Website: www.campusa.com
EDIT: This is not the
correct we address for the manufacturer. I believe the correct site is "www.camp-usa.com"
Comment: I find it very useful to have the web address as a hyperlink.
<< Measured: 2.45 oz (70 g)
Edit: Please re-verify the measured wight, I don't see a pair of crampons (even aluminum) weighing less than 3 oz (but I could be wrong)
<<(actually did not even have appropriate mountaineering boots yet).
EDIT: This statement needs either; “I actually..” or “actually, I...”
<<(x2 trips 2 days each)
EDIT: I'm not sure what the
“x2” refers to, I'm guessing you meant “2 trips of 2 days each” or something similar, please revise.
<<They are not suitable for Ice climbing or mixed terrain (i.e. rock).
EDIT: remove the capital “I” in Ice.
Edit: your “i.e. rock” is in reference to mixed terrain so you should identify multiple terrains n your example, such as “i.e. rock and ice”.
<<The crampons include a "Wear indicator" stamped on one spike of each crampon.
EDIT: to be consistent, you should capitalize (or not) both words in "Wear indicator", so "Wear Indicator" or "wear indicator".
<<When not in use I collapse the footplates, then with put them together so the points facing in, wrap the binding straps securely around them to hold them together.
EDIT: I think you need to remove the “with” in “then with put Them...”
Edit: Consider adding “are” to the phrase ...so the points
“are” facing in...”
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