77236EDIT: MSR Dragonfly Stove - Roger Ault
- Mar 1, 2009EDIT: MSR Dragonfly Stove - Roger Ault
We have some progress, but it seems many of my edits are not being fully
complied with. Because we have many ORs and Test Reports to handle, and we
are all volunteers, it is important that you do your best to comply with all
the edits, even if not all of them seem to be essential. Writers who are
conscientious about this do much better in Test Selection.
In this context I note that you have substituted 'fuel valve' for the
requested 'control valve'. I will accept this as reasonable, while pointing
out that the problems over getting this change have been noted.
You have some tendency to leave out the word 'the' in places. This may be
fine in spoken English, but for clarity the word should be used in written
English. I have provided some edits for this.
OK, if you wish to proceeed please do all the corrections and repost. There
is not a lot left to do.
> Fuel valve protrudes out the side andEDIT: 'One fuel valve ...'
> The pump screws into the fuel bottle and is pressurized by pumping.EDIT: As written it implies the pump is pressurised. Correct to:
'The pump screws into the fuel bottle, which is pressurized by pumping.'
> by leaving windscreen home.EDIT: 'by leaving the windscreen at home.'
> The fuel tube inserts into the pump and clips with a wire retainer.EDIT: either 'and is clipped in place with ...' or 'and is held with a wire
> The first time or two using it was a little tricky to get the correctEDIT: there is no such thing as a 'primer' on the stove, so you can't
> amount of fuel to operate the primer correctly
operate one. I suggest:
'the correct amount of fuel to prime the stove successfully'.
Using correct twice running is poor style, but I will let that pass.
> After it is burned I can slowly open fuel valve to produce a usableEDIT: 'I can slowly open the fuel valve ...'
> easily into the MSR blacklite pot that I generally use.EDIT: Blacklite
> Fuel jet can be cleaned by shakingEDIT: The fuel jet
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