im grateful that somebody has answered me. your help will be very valuable to me. i wrote my first fanfic 2 weeks ago and supposely posted on fanfiction site, though i couldnt find it which means-i believe-they didnt post it. i could have written and posted in spanish but i see nobody actually read them, so as youre gonna help me, im gonna send the first chapter of my story, so you can check whats wrong.
Chapter 1: wraith diplomacy.
WRAITH HIVE SHIP, QUEEN΄S CHAMBER.
Three wraith queens are standing on a dais.the first queen has long white hair and pale skin. The second one has long white hair ,too, but her skin is green. The third one has dark hair and pale skin. All of them are showing their big teeth and are dressed up in black.
The door opens and a fourth wraith queen comes in the dark room.she has long brown hair and brown skin, she΄s dressed up in white. She stands in front of the other three wraith queens.
The fourth queen speaks to the alliance queens.
-I have come to your presence in order to request being a member of this great alliance.
-1st queen: what makes you believe we΄re going to accept...your request.
-4th queen: as more allies you have, greater will be the strength of your alliance and more will be the battles won.
-2nd queen: your suggesting that we need you.
-4th queen: I΄m suggesting my resources would be of great value for this alliance. You΄re figthing against other alliance that rivals your power, but my contribution would make a different
The three allied queens remain in silent for a moment, gazing at each other and hissing. Then break the silence.
-3rd queen: in a few days we΄re going to engage in battle with another alliance in order to acquire a new feeding ground, so... your contribution could be of help to us.
-1st queen: as regards your request, we have agreed in letting you be a member of our alliance...if you engage in the next battle.
-4th queen: we have a deal.
-3rd queen: we will inform you when we΄re going to attack, so you may join us in the battle and your participation in this alliance will be confirmed.
The 4th queen hisses, shrugging at their gaze.
2nd queen: you may leave now.
The 4th queen turns away and
heads out the room.the door closing behind her.
-1st queen: her contribution in the acquiring of this new feeding ground may be favourable.
-3rd queen: it will give us a great advantage against the other alliance
-2nd queen: though, she will not join us in the culling. We can barely sustain our three hives.., then another one is unacceptable.
-3rd queen: she will help us destroy the other alliance.
-1st queen: then...we destroy her.
TO BE CONTINUED.
I can help you if you'd like, I'm very good at grammar and spelling. I
a little bit of spanish myself, so maybe that might help, though
maybe it doesn't matter.
--- In wraithbeta@yahoogro ups.com
, "fan_hp_21" <fan_hp_21@. ..> wrote:
> i speak spanish, though my english is not bad, but is not perfect. so i
> tried to upload a fanfic but theytell me it can be post because i got
> some problems, maybe you can help me with my errors, and does someone
> knows a web that uploads fanfics in spanish
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