Other than the usual grammar
and spell checking, I'd like advice on characterization, eventual plot holes and
It's currently 8.000 words long, and I assume the completed
fanfic won't be longer than 20/25K.
The plot is rather simple: While
escaping from a group of hostile natives, Ronon and Elizabeth are separated from
the rest of the team and left on the planet. Problems occur in Atlantis
and the search mission has to be delayed.
The Satedan and the Atlantis
leader are on their own, and on foot the Stargate is two days away.
Mild action, mostly character
study and friendship/UST. Rating will probably stay pg-13 throughout