Hi Cheryl, here are your edits in the standard BGT format. After revising you may upload once Yahoo fixes the site; please delete your Tests folder copy.Message 1 of 2 , Jun 1, 2010View SourceHi Cheryl, here are your edits in the standard BGT format. After revising you may upload once Yahoo fixes the site; please delete your Tests folder copy. Excellent report and photos! See you in two months. Richard
<<The High Sierra Summit 45 pack is a top loading overnight or weekend pack>>
Edit: top-loading [with a hyphen]
<<The color is a nice red and gray with the red color not appearing to bright. >>
EDIT: too bright [spelling]
<<It looks like this feature will enable the pack to accomodate varying load sizes.>>
EDIT: accommodate [Spelling here and two other places]
<<Under the top lid is a sewn on label that lists 12 survival essentials. >>
Edit: sewn-on [with a hyphen]
<<They have included what they call a media pocket that is attached on the left shoulder strap for cell phone, etc >>
Edit: I'd say "cell phone or comparably sized item." I'm guessing that the pocket will hold a cell phone or GPS but not both, and "et cetera" means "and."
<<It is removeable with two hook & loop attachments. >>
EDIT: removable [spelling]
The hydration pocket extends all the way down the inside of the pack and is large enough to easily side my 100 oz reservoir into it.>>
EDIT: slide [spelling]
Edit: I'd add "(3L)" after "100 oz." Up to you.
<<The front pocket will only fit narrow items so anything bulky needs to go into the main compartmentor side mesh pockets.>>
Edit: I think you mean the other way around: "Only narrow items will fit in the front pocket"
I look foward to testing this pack in the next few months and want to thank High Sierra Sport Company for this opportunity.>>
EDIT: forward [spelling]
Cheryl, Exceptionally thorough report with very useful photographs. You ve been hiking often! Here are your edits in the usual format; after revising you reMessage 1 of 2 , Aug 10, 2010View SourceCheryl,
Exceptionally thorough report with very useful photographs. You've been hiking often! Here are your edits in the usual format; after revising you're cleared to upload. Don't forget to delete your Test Folder copy.
Edit in IR section: You might delete the last sentence ("I look forward to . . .")
<< FIELD REPORT>>
EDIT: Add the date.
<< Distance: 15 mi (24 km) backpack, 7.5 mi (12 km) mi day hike>>
EDIT: Delete the extra "mi" (before "day hike")
<< Smaller items get stuffed in the spaces inbetween and around the
EDIT: in between [two words]
<< The front pocket is so limited when the pack is full so the only things I put in there is a trowel, tent stakes my cell phone and wallet.>>
EDIT: Add a comma after "tent stakes"
<<I ususally secure anything tall under the side compression straps>>
EDIT: usually [spelling]
<< When the pack is full, that pocket is so limited in it's usable space>>
EDIT: its usable space [no apostrophe]
<< and the rain cover should be large enough to accommodate anything stored there. >>
EDIT: accommodate [spelling]
<< but that could be due to the fact that I store my hydration bladder in the right side pocket with ususally 2 lb (.9 kg) less weight>>
EDIT: usually [spelling]
<<The front pocket is much more useful when used as a day pack since I don't have near as much inside the main compartment>>
Edit: nearly as much
<<I did one day hike where I brought and ice axe and crampons. >>
EDIT: an ice axe
<<The pack is lighter weight than the manufacturer states, it has held up really well, has held everything I need and has a lot of nice features. >>
Edit: lighter in weight
EDIT: The sentences in the series need parallel verbs. You could delete "it" before "has held up" or add "it" before "has held everything" and "has a lot."
<<Check back in a few months for my long term report.>>
Edit: Not required but it's customary to add your thanks to BGT and the manufacturer.