This is the official edit of your Mirage IR. Thank you for the prompt posting. In the future, to comply with the latest edict from our fearless leaders, please email a copy of the report directly to me as well. The html version was nicely laid out. The manufacturer's link worked properly. I did notice that in the email version your email address was active but not in the html version (I think the new policy is to have non-active links for personal email). Was the photograph of the sleeping bag one you took? If so, how did you get the background like that? I'd like to be able to do that! If it isn't your photograph, you need to identify the source. I really liked the close up of the toggles and it was very helpful in my understanding of your description.
The only edits I have were in the Packaging section of the report:
"small stuff sack, about which more later" is a little awkward. Maybe "...stuff sack. More on the stuff sack later."
"...but this must merely to have adhered to..." I think you are missing a word here.
Otherwise, I believe the report meets all the requirements of chapters 5 and 6 and the new form requirements. It is well written, concise, and helpful. Thank you for your efforts. I look forward to reading the FR.
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