Crimson The color crimson was the rose, whose thorns pierced my soul. The blood ran down my wounded flesh, like a thunderous river splashes through a hallow...
Remember the last time we made love? It was in that old mausoleum, up on that lonely knoll. Such a fitting end it seems. Your eyes stared empty. Your touch was...
ask any nine of ten muslems the terrorist comspiracy of the jewish sort came with names like Mohomad Abdule Moieser Beeks good jewish names learing to fly paid...
A Critique and your usual brand of constructive feedback needed on this opening scene. I am toying with expansion of this story to a length of about 5000 words...
ÒCHAINSÓ by Paul D. Aronson The pain was subsiding, so she opened her eyes. The harsh bruising of his touch marked her body in the morning light as it ...
Hey, btw, I was wondering if this is a big enough improvement, or if I should have spent more time on it before sending another draft...I'd love to know what...
We flew east that night in a mad race with death, mindless of perils ahead, blind to trechery behind. We crossed the great river and saw a strange light at the...
Hello everyone I just joined the group today and thought I would go ahead and introduce myself. My name is Rachel, I live in Pennsylvania and have been...
I muse over my Muse My adjective assembly-line Ad-verbal deaf-word thoughts Ovum-apples to wisely dine So, Light my Muse-fuse Self-ignite my views to choose It...
Wandering through rolling fields of ambient dreams, I harvest new seeds from withered fruit. Wondering, is this where dreams are born or is it where they come...
Above It All Wild horses live in my keyboard, grumpy dragons, lumbering giants, dainty faeries and the chuff of live steam, pulling me from word to word. On...
Scrolling down through this, before reading anything, I have to say it just looks better! Maybe I'm weird, but I like to look over my stuff page by page, just...
Like this one too. I used to read somewhat similar work from a girl who signed herself 'I Want Him'. She had some pretty powerful stuff. Wish I could find some...
Ok...here I go. This is just a random thought... ************************ "Soap Bubbles" Ever blow soap bubbles? A soft breath through a wand can make several....
Hi Everyone: I need to ask a favor. I dug up a form that is used for giving critiques. I made some additions to it, but I would like to know if there is...
Hey, I hope I've managed to fix up the suggestions I was given. Heres my third draft. Oh, and thanks to Theresa (In case you missed the other message I sent) ...
just thought I'd say I made a photo album (gnaghi99) if you feel like checking it out...it's mostly silly photoshop stuff of me, but there is one "normal" pic,...
Here's another... 'H-I-S' Rolling over...softly breathing... skin contacting skin. Electric currents of silken need race through me; would I ever tire? H-I-S...
Hi everybody: I thought you all might find this definition of a writer interesting. I was also wondering if you think it's an accurate description. If not, how...
Hey, I just wanted to thank Theresa, the advice you gave me was really helpful. I'm fixing up what you suggested, and when I'm happy i've done that, and fixed...
I really love it. I am deeply moved by it can see great potential for a very moving novel in it. You could educate society about suicide and what pushes...
Wings...I enjoyed your enthusiasm for my critique style, though I have to say I have no credentials at all really! Well, I guess being a writer myself could...
i must say i was a bit surprised at being invited to this group. i'm not sure who really invited me. (blinking--trying to see who's out there in the crowd)...
Dear Lyndanna I really love the story. The characters and situations are so realistic, but what is Eva's goal in life. It could be she wants independence and...
This is a very good rewrite. You have taken it to the next level, good job. Now I will go on and give you my comments with specific clips of the text. ...
www.celebratingonline.com Has anyone else seen this site? It looks pretty clever. You submit a chapter to a novel they're writing. If your chapter is one of...
Hey, everyone! My first publication, a little story called "The Cord" is up at the following link...the entire thing is a great read with all genres ...
