On Thu, 9/24/09, Rex Walton <rexwalton@...> wrote: From: Rex Walton <rexwalton@...> Subject: Wrex's Writerly UPdate: Yikes --WOMEN at the...
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Three_Times_A_Lady
kittykattklaws
Sep 24, 2009 8:21 pm
I am really still trying to iron out this thing...has some weird places I need to fix...... Ambiance of A Fall Day September 16,2009 Cool nippy air Coiled...
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Bernard d
rede2rollbaby
Sep 25, 2009 2:26 am
G'day KittyKatt, this, is some kind of a walk in in the not so black forest...The full descriptive gambit of both Nature and Emotion...All the vital substance...
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Susan Donahue
suzianne411
Sep 25, 2009 9:51 pm
Dear Jerry, What a wonderful response! You are so right about getting to know those who need help and listening to them. I spend a lot of time serving people...
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Jerry S
jerry5849
Sep 27, 2009 2:14 am
Hey folks, I just finished another song, so I thought I'd share it. All comments and critques are welcomed. Thanks. As always, Jerry Life's Key Grandma lived...
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Susan Donahue
suzianne411
Sep 27, 2009 2:19 am
Bravo, Jerry! I wish we had a way for members to record musical messages, or even poetry readings, so the rest of us could hear. I think you ought to go to...
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wings081
Sep 27, 2009 2:14 pm
Hi Jerry my old friend. I agree with you wholeheartedly. Re. "A writer can influence the times in which they live" I don't visit soup kitchens with hand-outs...
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wings081
Sep 27, 2009 5:01 pm
Hi Jerry Re: "Comments and critiques welcome" My only comment would be the use of "you'll" in "And you'll never fall" As a poem I qwould have used 'You will'...
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Jerry S
jerry5849
Sep 28, 2009 6:27 pm
Hey Suzianne, I'm happy you enjoyed this piece. It is based on my grandmother (my mother's mother) who died from TB when my mom was a little girl. On her...
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Jerry S
jerry5849
Sep 28, 2009 6:38 pm
My dear friend Wings, I'm certain you are as much of a blessing to your friends and neighbors as you are to us here at Ticket2Write. I know they must treasure...
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Jerry S
jerry5849
Sep 28, 2009 6:58 pm
Friend Wings, Thank you for your kind words. The only thing I can say is that in "country" music, contractions are often used (as well as other, less suitable...
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wings081
Sep 28, 2009 10:16 pm
Hi Jerry Re. "Adversity inspiring Charles Dickens" Dickens needed no research for his tales of poverty. When he was 12 yrs old his father was imprisoned for...
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Paul Gilbert
aviatorandwr...
Sep 29, 2009 10:47 am
... time I was on home leave from Afghanistan It must have been around the year 1836. Wow Wings. How old are you? LOL...
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eckrichs
Sep 29, 2009 10:54 am
Hi, I am taking a break from editing my first manuscript and decided to start a new project. Please let me know what you think about my first chapter. Whether...
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Bernard d
rede2rollbaby
Sep 29, 2009 10:54 am
"Stubbie", 375ml. bottle of beer. A "glass can". "Crush" restrictive chute for controlled release of animals from a fenced enclosure. "Clacker", also...
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Amy
riisna
Sep 29, 2009 10:56 am
THE MOON AND THE PENNY By Amy Thompson. ________________________________________ On a cloudless night a penny lay on the windowsill of a young boy's bedroom....
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wings081
Sep 29, 2009 12:27 pm
Hi Paul Re. "How old are you?" By present day standards I would be considered to be on the cognizant side of my dotage. However I have lived so many past lives...
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Susan Donahue
suzianne411
Sep 29, 2009 2:21 pm
Dear Wings, You made my day! The spirit of that flaxen haired Valkyrie lives on. Suzianne...
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Susan Donahue
suzianne411
Sep 29, 2009 2:26 pm
Dear Eckrichs, I didn't get past the second paragraph. Why are you using first person and present tense? Try third person in the past tense and see if your...
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wings081
Sep 29, 2009 5:06 pm
Dear Amy That was one of the most delightful childrens' stories I have read in many a year.. Takes me back to my junior school where once a week we had to...
G'day KittyKatt, tweaked to perfection... the sights, the scents, the sounds, and all the original ambience... Thanks, Mate, for the experience... and the...
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jjgord@...
Sep 29, 2009 9:40 pm
In a message dated 9/29/2009 2:10:24 P.M. Central Daylight Time, kittykattklaws@... writes: Is this Tweeked enough? I have revised the first 8 lines. I...
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Shannon Eckrich
eckrichs
Sep 30, 2009 8:04 am
Hi, Suzianne, Â Â Thank you for your critique. When I started writing I wanted to put the entire thing in first person, present tense. For some reason my mind...
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Alan
alanrichards84
Sep 30, 2009 8:04 am
Looking To Help You Family Web Magazine is a new venture for me.Although i have been writing since I was 10, I never dreamed that the opportunity to create and...
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Amy Thompson
riisna
Sep 30, 2009 8:05 am
Dear Moderators, I'm a new member of the group, and I'm not sure how to post. Should I start by criticizing the work of someone else, should I introduce myself...
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albiaicehouse
Sep 30, 2009 12:26 pm
So we overlook the sources of joys and miracles around us all the time? So the penny doesn't spend many centuries in a landfill, how about having the boy toss...
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wings081
Sep 30, 2009 1:07 pm
Dear Amy Re. "Should I introduce myself?" Your post 39173 was a great introduction to your style of writing. A critique was offered at 39177 and lately from...
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Amy Rissna Thompson
riisna
Sep 30, 2009 9:39 pm
Dear Wings, thank you for telling me what my conduct should be in this group. Since I’m new, I thought it would be better to ask first. From your post, I...
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Amy Rissna Thompson
riisna
Sep 30, 2009 9:39 pm
Dear Rod, I think that’s the best idea yet. It’s almost the same gesture, but it let’s us know that the penny has a future, and that other adventures are...
