Susan, This is powerful on a visceral level. Well worded, and well crafted, and highly emotive. I'm certain that there are not a few of us who in retrospect...
Jerry, Nice job. I'd take another look at punctuation. Good use of commas but the other punctuation is missing, and that effects how to read it. Second ...
Dear Jerry, Me thinks you are too modest. Thank you for the kind words, but don't under estimate yourself. You have the power to shake the tree with your own...
Yikes! I think you over-thought this by a mile. I am not passing judgment, just observing that a woman of her generation who was beautiful and bright and...
Dear Jerry...You got it! But, I am not surprised. There is a little of the flower-child in you and the people who came of age when you did, so you can...
Dear Jerry, Remember that old saying about great minds thinking alike? I see the same message in "Time" as in my "Stolen Moments," but from a different point...
That's what kept me coming back a=to this, Susan. I knew there was something, but couldn't quite put my finger on it. You mentioning the lyrical quality of...
Stolen Moments It is always a pleasure when our teacher, our savant, steps away from marking our schoolwork and submits one of her own literary treasures. ...
Dear Wings, I am so sorry for your loss. Nothing makes us feel so completely unable to control our own sphere of life than to be unable to avert the death or...
Dear Suzi Thank you for those kind words.It is especially hard when a child of your own family dies. I believe it was Keats who wrote: "Is there another life?...
Dear Wings, Back in the days when I was attending classes in preparation for my Confirmation in the Methodist Church, I also discovered William Wordsworth, and...
Wings my old friend, May I offer my deepest condolences to you and your family? Too often are those we love taken from us. This year I lost my father, but he...
Hey all! Just writing to let you know that my website with a new design is up and running. Take a look and make sure to leave me a note on my guestbook! If...
One of my friends babies died a few months ago... a baby who was much desired as she was 42 and it has devastated all of us and there are no words to say; I...
Paradise?... The mind, for some, remains a prison, a chasm…where nothing, lies beyond. Borders towering…sheer cliffs arisen, a sanctuary, of which none...
Like a Thousand Others You slipped away, a sweet fragrance inside the cancerous storm. A long life...yes, but who counts the bright leaves that whirl in...
SINGING IN THE RAIN A POEM ... you are young, your skin is taut my heart reels like a guitar tight and plucked for the first time you are young and your crown ...
Dear Suzi Your religion must be a great comfort to you. We have many Weslyan chapels scattered around Cornwall. A great many have been converted to dwellings...
Jerry,it's so good to see you back on board.You've been away far too long. Thank you for those kind words and I'm sorry to hear about the loss of your...
Dear Pauline That was a beautiful poem,striaght from the heart. Thank you so much for sharing with us As always Wings ... from ... treasures. ... years ... to ...
When our good friend Bernard from Oz submits, I suspect those members of a delicate nature prepare themselves for a taste of the bawdier side of life.To those...
G'day Wings, Thanks old Mate...I have to push aside the 'Yobbo' on occasion. Sorrow with you at the loss of the little one...Know how it is...lost my treasured...
Dear Deborah The title of this doesn't stand out too well for my liking, unlike some others I glance at on my shelves, such as "The Angels Weep" or "The...
Hi Wings, Thanks for your careful reading. all good points to consider.hope I get more comments. thanks, Deborah ________________________________ From:...
Dear Deborah: I will add an "Amen" to the comments made by Wings. The title does not draw attention to the piece and it does not really address the subject of...
Deborah, Is this piece non-fiction? No matter, for my comments would be the same either way. Please be patient with me because I have some points to make first...
Suzianne, Your comments are very constructive and helpful. I should have noted this is a short story but I am glad to know it might make an interesting longer...
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