... From: ChicagoPoetry.com <chicagopoetry@...> To: suzianne411@... Sent: Thursday, March 8, 2007 2:50:20 PM Subject: Women's History Month...
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queen_of_cryptic_cyph...
queen_of_cry...
Mar 9, 2007 10:18 pm
Dear Jesse, You haven't broken the board at all. Like Carol, I have been so busy with school, a mother with dementia, another ill family member, and job and...
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rede2rollbaby
Mar 10, 2007 5:43 pm
The Fields Speak, That All May Listen… Can you hear the distant bugle, the sound of phantom drums, Perchance, the myriad spirit whispers, born upon the...
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Carol
strayspay
Mar 10, 2007 5:57 pm
Hi All, Hope I'm not overstepping but guess the moderator will intercept if I am. I have a story and I'd love comments. Einstein Under the `mater vine The...
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Susan Donahue
suzianne411
Mar 10, 2007 6:10 pm
Dear Bernard...This is excellent! It is nice to see a poet use rhyme without drawing attention to it. This was done with a subtle hand. My only suggestionss...
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Susan Donahue
suzianne411
Mar 10, 2007 6:48 pm
This will be a major event in a city that is at its best in the Spring. What could be better than a gathering of writers, poets, publishers and readers in the...
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Susan Donahue
suzianne411
Mar 10, 2007 6:53 pm
Todd Stone returns to Palatine! Yes, he will be back at the Palatine Public Library, 700 N. North Court Palatine, IL 60067 for a mini Novelist's Boot Camp....
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wings081
Mar 10, 2007 7:50 pm
i Bernie Another masterpiece from your pen and how very topical of the world today. To quote Corinthians: "Death is swallowed up in victory. O death,where is...
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Diva
the_only_dat...
Mar 10, 2007 9:44 pm
but it ends so abruptly...... I wanted more. Marge Carol <gillygumdrop@...> wrote: Hi All, Hope I'm not overstepping...
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wings081
Mar 10, 2007 10:10 pm
Hi Carol, I agree with Marge, our Diva, there is so much further for this story to go. Boots could earn his keep by alerting his master and mistress to a ...
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wings081
Mar 10, 2007 10:29 pm
Dear friends, It's Saturday night over here and I thought I might cheer you up with a story sent me by my young sister from Michigan. She loves to have a dig...
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Carol
carol_emt87
Mar 10, 2007 11:39 pm
Dear Carol, Use the foreshadowing technique Wings mentions here to set up a nice plot twist with the abandoned dog beating his former owner at something--dog...
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rede2rollbaby
Mar 11, 2007 9:33 am
Thanks Susan, for both the suggestions and the kind comment... I agonised about the use of 'perchance' but it seemed to give the best ease of recital of the...
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rede2rollbaby
Mar 11, 2007 9:35 am
G'day Wings, the scriptures in their many varied forms, contain messages of value and relevance for most topical subjects I am forced to admit...most seldom...
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jesse45039
Mar 11, 2007 9:35 am
Cute, but I still think of computers as female. ... with ... can...
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queen_of_cryptic_cyph...
queen_of_cry...
Mar 11, 2007 9:36 am
TAKE TWO Aspirins in the morning. Appetizers for segues in unfamiliar conversation. Computers in case one hard drive fails. Pictures to keep the most...
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queen_of_cryptic_cyph...
queen_of_cry...
Mar 11, 2007 9:37 am
Dearest Bernie, If only this were enough. Good poem but lines are a bit long and it has an unsteady flow mate. Reading it aloud feels awkward to me. Maybe with...
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albiaicehouse
Mar 11, 2007 9:38 am
Bernard, I am an ardent supporter of clear, specific images. For instance, one youth with dark wavy hair or something physically specific, versus broad brush,...
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Manfred
r_u_sirius2
Mar 11, 2007 2:43 pm
... looks like Bernie and I have been dipping our pens into each other's inkwells ... Flowers of Glory (c) Manfred Vijars - March 2007 Flowers of Glory, in...
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Susan Donahue
suzianne411
Mar 11, 2007 2:44 pm
Once in a while, I pass along a suggestion for a book that could be of value to writers. Todd A. Stone's, "Novelist's Boot Camp" could be just what you need...
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queen_of_cryptic_cyph...
queen_of_cry...
Mar 11, 2007 4:59 pm
Just to clarify that when I said "I wish this were enough" I meant I wished the memories of past wars were enought to stop all future one. It was very late....
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albiaicehouse
Mar 11, 2007 5:01 pm
If You Hadn't If you hadn't shared the struggle for fourteen hours that brought you out where you could breath the sharp, filling air. Your bleating cries, ...
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queen_of_cryptic_cyph...
queen_of_cry...
Mar 11, 2007 10:03 pm
Albi, Such a wonderful, strong, wrenching poem. Before people hack away at it, I would suggest this: lenthen some of the lines. Many of the shorter ones chop...
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albiaicehouse
Mar 11, 2007 10:04 pm
Gwen, I like how this is both playful and insightful. I would prefer to change "expensive cognac", as it distracts one to thinking about the basest economics,...
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queen_of_cryptic_cyph...
queen_of_cry...
Mar 11, 2007 10:05 pm
Bernie, I think you try to say so much that it is difficult for you to express your thoughts in the conventions of rhymed poetry. I really think you might find...
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Carol
carol_emt87
Mar 11, 2007 10:23 pm
Dear Albi, Oh my goodness, you've done it again. So poignant and gut wrenching. I knew exactly where this piece would go and I followed it through to the end....
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David Roth
davidjroth2002
Mar 11, 2007 11:57 pm
Gwen, Wonderfully clever bit 'o verse to which I would add "Two words to compliment a good writer: well done" Dave...
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rede2rollbaby
Mar 11, 2007 11:58 pm
-'Geezus' Mate, this literally brought tears to my eyes...and that's a fact. If I in any way inspired this, then I am proud, it's a fine piece of writing. ...
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David Roth
davidjroth2002
Mar 11, 2007 11:58 pm
Albi, Pardon my ignorance, but is there such a thing as 'bad' cognac? Dave...
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queen_of_cryptic_cyph...
queen_of_cry...
Mar 12, 2007 2:31 am
Albi, I actually did change this to "premium". I read that cognac is so expensive in some parts of Europe that they water it down with sparkling water or...
