very neat poem. you put some great imagery into a relatively simple form. forgive me for being nitpicky, but i did notice a few points where you broke out of...
Hi Suzianne, Thanks for responding to my poem. I too, struggled with the word "forged". Actually I struggled with the entire line. I think I'll rework the...
Hi Wings, Thanks for responding to my poem. I will use your suggestions. In stanza 9 'red' and 'hot' were intended to be separated, so I put the comma between...
Okay, I don't post a lot, but I'm working on the pr stuff. Anyway, here's the good news. The Other Side of the Door is now available in paperback. Soooo...
Hi Karen Allow me to make a few minor suggestions to your beautiful poem: Stanza 7 for "it won't hurt" I would substitute "it will not hurt" Stanza 9 did you...
Tommy Lightfeather wrenched the throttle of the Harley just a little tighter. The heightened roar of the v-twin motor went unconsidered by its exhausted...
... Jeff, thank you very much. i was asking for input and got more than i really expected. you have been very helpful. i hope as i continue to post this...
Welcome to ticket2write, Delta...This is a very nice first message and poem. Your poem is well written and a pleasure to read. Perhaps the following line...
... Overall, ... and ... fix. I ... descriptive ... Take ... thanks Sam for you help it was nothing short of outstanding as was Jeff's in the earlier post. ...
hm, Comments are in caps after the passages to which they refer. Overall, I think it's pretty good. The simile and metaphor get a bit heavy, and there are some...
... Try: "It was the stale, acidic taste of air gone stagnant." ... horizon ... One or the other of these, both slows it down. and with it the impression of a...
Hi everyone, This is my first post so I hope I do it right. Thanks to those who spend time to read it. And thanks to my dear friend who continue's to encourage...
Matter Felonious heart thumping. Melodious art dumping. Songs or screeches? It’s hard to tell if my hand reaches from dream or from cell. . I’m not even...
... contract by publish america which i quickly tossed in the trash. their books are way over priced, they sell very few copies and they tie it up for seven...
would love to hear what you guys think, good, bad, indifferent. this is part 1 of ch 1. thanks for your input It was not the heat that made the night so...
I'm trading in my Microwave and I'll be sad to see it go. It has given 14 years of faultless performance but now the wife says it has to be replaced. She is...
Congratulations, Linda! The synopsis sounds very intriguing. I look forward to hearing more about your publishing process as it takes place. Abundant...
Hi Jerry, I think this poem is great. I'm glad you added the names of the crew. My heart goes out to their families as well. It's a sensitive poem for a tragic...
Hi Jerry Whilst echoing the sentiments of Susan (11219) my thoughts are also with the surviving families of those brave astronauts. Many times I have watched...
Well said, Jerry....Thank you for posting this. What a sad end to such brilliant lives. Their stars will fade, but never be fully extinguished. Suzianne...
Dear Linda...I raise a virtual flute of the finest bubbly and congratulate you. Good for you, and best wishes for great reviews and sales. You make us all...
... Hey everybody, I just got word from Publish America that my book is now available on the publishers website. Linda.L.Rucker *********** Congratulations on...
Congratulations, Linda! It is obvious that you are happier than any words we could offer might make you. It is always great to hear of another's success. ...
Flight Beautiful dove Soar far above The troubled clouds Stars which sing Grace your wings Boundless flight Silent night The sun awakens Dawn of red Dawn of...
Linda, I don't think I can even imagine what you are feeling right now! Congratulations! I'm interested too in what happens after a book comes out? Are...
Hey everybody, I just got word from Publish America that my book is now available on the publishers website. I haven't received the word about when it will be...
Scot, I'm enjoying your story. My mind has already jumped ahead to find out that the rich woman he is meeting with is his natural mother. I could be wrong, but...
How about this for dedication to the art of writing: Wilbur Smith, a multi millionaire top selling author of African adventure stories, starts writing a new...
TARPAULIN SKY seeks submissions of highest quality poetry, prose, reviews and visual arts for the Spring 2003 issue. Complete guidelines can be found at...
