Removing unnecessary words leaves a senryu: at dawn we take up our silence let it fill another day Not every short poem is a tanka. ~K~ ... -- Editor, Atlas...
M. Kei
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Feb 1, 2008 7:18 pm
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Ground Hog the shadow always the same test always there over my shoulder haunting me (c) 2008 Sandy Vrooman -- "Expectations are resentments under...
Interesting thought Kei, although as the writer of the original poem the word 'again' is absolutely necessary. It reinforces the choice to take up 'our...
Hi, Paul. Honestly, when I read this one the other day, I too wondered why "again" was in there. To me, again is implied by "another." I suppose if you then...
sacred day American life suspended to watch a game of clocked manipulations I watch the tight ends (c) 2008 Krystall Knobbs -- "Expectations are resentments...
coat slips from the hook to the floor advantageous cat has a new nest (c) 2008 Sandy Vrooman -- "Expectations are resentments under construction." -Anne...
the unbroken day silence computer hum sanctuary no birds yet focused on stillness traffic noises begin amplification commerce ever wakeful coin toss on the 50...
That was yesterday, Paul ... hope you're better today. I'm thinking about L5, too. Often, I get the advise to make that the strongest of the five. Not...
Thanks Ella, I'll give it some thought. Best Paul ... thinking about L5, too. Often, I get the advise to make that the strongest of the five. Not necessary,...
Hi Vidur, I'm not sure of L1 -- 'to lap up a boat'? You also have several images here, and the reader could be confused with which image belongs to what. The...
All, The editor and chief of Canadian Zen haiku has asked me to step in as associate editor while he recovers for a severe cat bite. We are looking to short...
As a sailor, I can't imagine 'languidly' sleeping wrapped in soaking wet sails upon a beach. Maybe if I had been knocked unconscious in a wreck... but I...
M. Kei
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Feb 8, 2008 5:19 pm
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Thanks a lot for your opinion.The scene is actually after a storm. By stretching the imaginaiton a bit further I attempted at sensing a bit of erotic out of...
The February 15th deadline for submissions for MET 7, the Spring 2008 issue of Modern English Tanka, is this coming Friday. Don't let the deadline slip by you....
Hi Sandy, I don't really know if L2 should be the way it is ... is my only comment. Ella kitsune miko <kitsunemiko@...> wrote: I said I loved him he...
Ella and Hortensia, Thanks for your comments. Perhaps L4 should be "different kinds of love" Sandy ... -- "Expectations are resentments under construction." ...
I found it to be delightful. Almost sent it to my last [now ex-] lover. It does what short forms are supposedly intended to do - it absolutely captures the...
That would do nicely Sandy. In either case, it's pure delight. Norla In a message dated 2/11/2008 11:12:28 A.M. Eastern Standard Time, kitsunemiko@......
Does sound like a shipwreck. norla We!: a Progressive Voice _http://www.mytown.ca/we_ (http://www.mytown.ca/we) In a message dated 2/8/2008 12:20:01 P.M....
Modern English Tanka Press Announces Take Five : The Best Contemporary Tanka of 2008 February 12, 2008 - Baltimore, MD Modern English Tanka Press announces a...
This press release has been corrupted in transit, so that the address given at the end is wrong. The correct address is: Attn: Take Five M. Kei, Editor P O Box...
M. Kei
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Feb 13, 2008 7:09 pm
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I think you're missing my point. Sleeping wrapped up in something wet is not something anybody would do voluntarily -- especially not a sailor. Sails are...
M. Kei
kujaku@...
Feb 13, 2008 7:09 pm
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