Dark muses inspire some of the best poetry. In a message dated 7/23/2008 9:38:01 A.M. Pacific Daylight Time, kitsunemiko@... writes: Shanna, No need to...
Thanks very much Ella. This new generation is the 'what have you done for me lately' generation. It's the 'instant gratification' kids that will be deciding...
I posted the original of this poem back in June. the Dachshund fidgets as leaves swirl about his master -- with the wind they become one and are swept away or ...
ashes on the mantlepiece every hour we are apart the clock chimes reading through Dad's letters home a line about my birth - I see him in the mirror each...
What a wonderful site of tanka. I look forward to reading through the past posts. I really enjoyed the Gulf Coast tanka and the wind chime tanka. I am sure...
beach peas cluster in sand dunes faded pink overboard ten hours ago bees drone in my ears I don't know if this is too obscure - beach peas are related to the ...
Interesting, Trish--a slip or the pea pod stays viable for five years? I have to say that my reading was that you were the one overboard. I would still be...
Yes, it should read as if I had fallen overboard. While not quite the ten hours I've mentioned, I was left to prune in the water for a couple of hours after...
No adult supervision, as they say? Lucky you didn't do a Natalie Wood. L ... From: Trish Shields <trishardent@...> Subject: Re: [Tanka] beach peas - c&c...
My sister and friend were afraid to tell my parents what had happened. What pissed me off was even though they dragged their feet until after dinner my sister...
You'll never know what your parents' pillow talk was that night. L ... From: Trish Shields <trishardent@...> Subject: Re: [Tanka] beach peas - c&c welcome...
Incidentally, it wasn't bees that I heard in my ear - it was a siren after my sister told our parents what had happened. I don't remember much after that...
Hi, Rainbow! I had a little difficulty reading your tanka because Yahoo inserted a double space between each and everything. I like your sense-switching in...
I wonder if you should say sirens instead of bees--as it is, it sort of sounds like trying to get away from an angry swarm by ducking. L ... From: Trish...
But it is the drone of bees I thought the sirens were. Besides, how does siren connect with L1? bees on beach peas clustered amongst sand dunes faded pink...
Great Grand-Dad spent hours in the trenches shell-shocked his cane topped with brass a hand-crafted piece of art My grandfather was one of millions who spent...
Welcome, Rainbow ... do we call you rainbow?  For starters, try to avoid capitalizing. This has to do with the origins of the form, which lie in Japan,...
I like your L1 a bit less now ... maybe something about the alliteration, 'b' being a heavy sound in itself. Actually, from the start, it's L3 that's been...
My uncle (WWII, China-Burma theater) had a windbell from a brass shell casing. What a mournful sound that was--far more depth than anything you can buy. L ...
We had an ornate brass umbrella stand when I was growing up and I finally asked my father about it when I was about 14, I guess. He told me some of the guys...
The only one that's not clear for me is L5 ... you're not talking about your chld there, right? Come to think of it, what do you mean in L4 also? Just...
I like all of them, Trish, but most especially the first. Ella ... ashes on the mantlepiece every hour we are apart the clock chimes reading through Dad's...
This is also a beauty, Trish. I guess the older generation wasn't encouraged to talk things out of their system, but instead be 'strong' and 'grown-up'. ...
Lovely! I'll reflect on it some more after I turn in ...  her brush strokes the paper evenly her thoughts otherwise hidden from me  Ella ... ink on rice...
Ella's made some excellent suggestions, Trish. You're off to a good start. I suggest you work on the rhythm, the meter, the musicality that is tanka ... ...
